Heavy
Heavy heavy in my veins
Feeling like a world of
(worn out) pain
Pounding head and pounding feet
Throbbing mind my thoughts are beat
I line them up like bowling pins
I watch my thoughts fall down. Again.
(all it means is i can't think)
The tv feels like overstimulation
I really think I need a new sensation
But everything is just to bright
And I cannot pass out tonight
But well,
Tommorrow's just another day
By four am the time should run away
Unconciouness should visit now you say
YAY
so i can wake up just in time
to work all day so that at night
I've a jolly excuse to get wasted!
Hey, wouldn't you say?
Author notes
"It's been a hard day's night, and I been working like a dog... It's been a hard day's night, I should be sleeping like a log..."
^^ I love that song.
A contest entry
- Write a poem from a song quote - Drakino's 1st by .
450 points, ended December 23, 2006, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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i found your poem
while cute, slightly confusing. Your beat is a touch irratic and the way it's written.. though Im not sure how it is written is also distracting. Perhaps more punctuation, because maybe there is a rythem that you started out with that i didnt catch on to. and yeah.. that's probably spelled wrong.
However, I just have to let this know because I thought it was.... so awesome.. though I dont know why.
Feeling like a world of
(worn out) pain
I very much enjoyed how you but things in ( ). Like a secret thought you're sharing only with the reader and no one else. ^_^ Thanks!!! -
I think that this is a good interpretation of the quote, which I am glad you like. Good luck in this contest.
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