As the sun caresses my skin,
My eyes follow
an ant's busy dance.
My mind now
enslaved, by this
creature's, quest for life.
Its true beauty,
hidden, deep within
a petite space.
My soul
yearns, for such
enabled spirited traits.
Its strength
of endurance
to achieve
its goal.
Its ability
to strive, within
trial and error.
Its desire
to defy
endless failure.
Its constant hope,
the face of courage,
A creature with
flowing willpower,
A model of size
is nothing,
for the combat
in a human's world.
A pest?
NO
A creation of nature
blessed
with
humanity's traits.
Author notes
'tweakermuffin'
"Beauty is in the eye of the beholder"
In a list
A contest entry
- Animals by xoxohorses13xoxo.
410 points, ended August 10, 2007, 13 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Very nice, I like the twist at the end, about how ants have humanity's characteristics. Very creative, with good imagery.
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Very unique and original thoughts on your topic! Well written. Best of luck in the contest.
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I would not call an ant beautiful but you are right in saying that if you look close enough you will find a hidden beauty inside this tiny creature.Well done and good luck in the contest. Val
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wow very nice =D I liek it alot...you got teh point of teh contest xD
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interesting. not quite what i was looking for, but still a nice piece. thank you for entering!
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Well, as you say, "beauty is in the eye of the beholder"!! Can't say that ants do it for me but I appreciate what you pen here ... many congrats on the silver!
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that was beautiful and you did a wounderful job.
THAT IS THE FIRST POEM I HAVE READ ABOUT ANTS AND I ENJOYED THE THOUGHFULNESS YOU GAVE TO THIS ANIMAL
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nice poem you got a lot of clapies in the past for this poem,thank you for the poem on my contest,goodluck!!!
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Great job lyrebird74, yet another good one from you. Can't say I'm surprised in the least!
~M~
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Wonderful
I admire the ant almost above all other insects for their tireless work, and as you said their never quit attitude. The poem had good flow and brought to light some of the ants many wonderful attributes. Well Done. Thank you for your submission and good luck!! Write On!! Fly
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Wonderful poem, you captured the essance of the ant so wonderfully. I would love to comment more but I must say bugs give me the creeps. I loved the flow and rythmn of the poem but can't really comment on subject. Sorry
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Beautiful. For everything there is a reason and a purpose...even the ant. Yet few recognise the beauty of the fulfillment of purpose!
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Ants have always intrigued me. How they live and what they accomplish is amazing. As a child I always enjoyed watching the specials on tv. You have captured the beauty of these hardworking creatures so well. Excellent!
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Firstly, a wonderful poem.
However, my contest was asking for descriptions of physical features. You did a great job with emotional ones, but it's still not what the contest was looking for. A great poem, but not something that fits the contest. -
every thing has a greatness to it. and for a change some one has sceen it with out being shown. some one who can see beauty in a thing that is typically found distastfull. congrates to you! i love it love it love it!
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I'm pressed, breath out now!!!
signs of a strong woman here, with mind glowing ventures like, loyalty and determination, as all ants have this and so does she. Lovely metaphors.
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Hi, ants have my admiration always, they are hard workers and have great team work going on between them, a lovely poem, it is so easy to keep them out of the house I put a cup of brown sugar outside and they seem happy with that, lovely poem, all the best Di
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first you birthed a butterfly in its rainbowing beauty, now you eulogize an ant in its enviable stregth of strive, i admit that some of these minute creatures are at times so much more exquisite than fellow humans, as to be conquered by their beguiling simplicity. why beguiling? because we, humans, in our misled vaingloriousness forget that each one of them is a miracle of creation as well, at times even more so than us, and the fact that we lack a common language does not necessarily make them any less valuable in this world. your eye is partly analytical, partly romantic, partly envious – the beauty of it (of this poem) is that you are never arrogant in your humanity.
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Forgot to applaud...
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Beautiful imagery you have shown how ants are wonderfully equiped for life on earth as much as we are,a very good write. I just love the end keep writing. Doomday.
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Hey! This is pretty good stuff you have going on in here! I like it!
I'm pretty sure I've read and commented on your stuff before and liked it then too. I think that you're right about the ants. I think they're pretty amazing creatures too. But when I say it, everyone looks at me funny! lol
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Excellent
This was a beautiful account of a much maligned worker. Beauty is indeed more than skin deep and your words have opened another dimension. I wrote a poem a while back called "The Army", in a similar strain. Good luck in this contest
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there is a depth and undertone to this that goes and flows excellently. keep writing......you have a lot to offer. Best of wishes to you. good luck in all that you do....peace always in all ways. You rock....
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This piece is really well done, and brings to life the importance of all creatures great and small, Bella
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A GOOD WITE AND APPEALING AT THAT a CREATION OF NATURE WITH HUMAN TAITS. A GREAT ANALOGY.tHANK YOU FOR SHARING THIS PIECE.a GREAT OBSERVATION
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this is simply a joy to read and to see
annie scott gave you the only advice that i would. your poems is a summary of the attributes of all the 10,000 buddhas. I was struck by the ant picture and your first stanza. so much in such a small thing....as a universe. your last line incorporaates this as a summary, this is simply very honest and pure writing. It is an anthemn of hope and encouragement.
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Bravo! How true indeed Tracey! what a most excellent comaprison. Those ants will defy such hardships to gain their spoils and necessities, just as humanity does.
Great write and best to you in this contest
Gaylene
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really like your poety
thank you for sharing it. And I am honored
that you would have me read and give my opinion.
again i'm touched deep within and ponder it with appreciation.
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I never thought that poem about ants would be interesting but you wrote it very well. Great poem, keep writing and keep up the good work.
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brilliant write
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Very good
I saw one place that needs to be adjusted, 1st verse, last line- "an ants dance" should look like this, "an ant's dance". Make sense? Otherwise you did good.
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heyy
this is awesome! a really good write. i love how you wrote about ants. i figured no one would write about them. but the way you wrote this is very interesting. i like this.
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A very creative write! You hold alot of talent. I enjoyed this very much.
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Oh, so true
I've had this kind of thoughts while watching snails. You know, there are so many beautiful things in life humanity totally ignores. Small life-forms are always fascinating... -
This is such a powerful piece! Vibrant and hopeful, from start to finish! I can't believe you just started writing - you certainly have a knack with it! I look forward to reading more from you, and thank you for reading me as well!
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Wonderful
This is well written. great imagery you have displayed here. The correlation between man and insect. The drive the desire. Very well done. I loved this. The ant is a very busy creature..always going, struggling to survive. Sounds a lot like a parent. Thank you for sharing this. and best of luck to you. Keep writing. Dawn
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