It’s just a look, with an open eye,
A smile and a touch,
A walk along the shore of dreams,
Dreams from a Childs heart,
Where the moon reflects off the water,
Wave-less, with a whisper of wind,
You inhale, as gentle words are spoken,
With a sensitive tongue you speak,
Drifting with a midnight ocean,
Walking with love, you are unique.
It’s just a step, with genuine feet,
Damp sand and warm air.
An endless sea that shares the future,
A future that’s held in lovers arms.
Where the water washers away your regrets,
And the scent of Lilly’s linger in the air,
You exhale, as cloudy windows dim and darken,
Squinting for just a peak.
Drifting towards uncertain doors,
Walking with hope, you are unique.
It’s just a breath, a gentile shiver,
A heart bit and a shallow pulse,
A motionless moment of silences,
This silences where shadows become the horizon
And the senses re-quench there thirst,
You inhale, tasting the salt of peaceful thought,
Where the day is given to the meek.
Drifting with a new sun rising,
Walking with truth, you are unique.
Author notes
Options: 1)
A contest entry
- enter anything u want !!! by sweethelper.
300 points, ended February 19, 2007, 51 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - our angel needs romancing! by honey bear.
550 points, ended February 24, 2007, 5 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - All You Need Is Love by xSweetDreamsx.
800 points, ended August 31, 2007, 53 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I Believe in Love by Star Shine.
450 points, ended October 9, 2007, 15 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give me an uplifting poem! by TwiztidMaggot.
600 points, ended December 11, 2007, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Love :) by LeilaJayne.
600 points, ended June 27, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Romance by Frodofan.
600 points, ended February 9, 2008, 18 entries
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525 points, ended April 10, 2008, 34 entries
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600 points, ended October 29, 41 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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the imagery is fantastic, i really enjoyed this and the repetition is nice too
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I like this, beautiful imagery. Loved reading this piece, enjoyed it
Thank you for entering my contest
Evershine -
Not bad. I'd have liked the rhyme to be a little more, but it is nice as it is. The repetition works well for this poem.
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Very nice...thanks for the entry!!!
Az -
wow. this is really good, and it's a winner in some contests! haha. nice work! keep it up! congradulations on your bronze trophy and your honorable mentions... Best of luck in my contest! you wrote this exactly one year ago from today! lol. that's cool! lol. keep up your wonderful work! and you're unique too! We all are! lol.
Crimson -
"with genuine feet" is an inspired phrase, truly. This is so creative and full of affirmation, and the classy soft style in which you write is perfect for this loving message.
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OMG
i'm...seriously impressed. fantastic structure, brilliant heart-felt descriptions, liking the you are unique bit. i have no faults cept you inhale and exhale but in a sence using that vocabualry has its own sweetness. the you are unique i understand the sentiment but do you agree it feels odd. But except for minor, and i mean minor errors i see i love this poem. well done!
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interesting
the pattern you set was very interesting... i liked it.
good luck in the contest and thanks for entering!
-AC -
Very nice poem I enjoyed it very much it was well written and very sweet. Thank you for sharing this with us.
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Lovely!!
Thanks so much for the entry!!!!
Angie -
This was prerfect i could help but keep reading!!!
Your really a great poet and you touched my heart in the first line that I read. I hope to see more of your poems.
Good luck!
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this is a very lovely poem and i see our angel loved it too, good luck in the contest with this very touching love poem
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Sincerely I congratulate u for such a beautiful poem
It straight touched my heart!
I like the eloquence of the simplicity you used...
Good luck!
~~Grace~~ -
wow !! great write , the bet on i read today !! realy amazing !! it was a love poem , and i loved it !!
the lines i liked best were
"It’s just a step, with genuine feet,
Damp sand and warm air.
An endless sea that shares the future,
A future that’s held in lovers arms.
Where the water washers away your regrets,
And the scent of Lilly’s linger in the air,
You exhale, as cloudy windows dim and darken,
Squinting for just a peak.
Drifting towards uncertain doors,
Walking with hope, you are unique"
thank you so much for entering and best wishes in the cotnest ,
your well wisher ,
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im sorry to say this but im afraid im going to have to remove this poem from the contest. if you read the rules it clearly states that you must write "granite" in the authors notes section so i know you've read and complied with the rules. feel free to enter another poem but this one will be removed from the contest.
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Beautiful
This one, I love...
a love poem in every sense of the word and a unique one at that....There is nothing better than a love poem that is not cliche' ...
These lines really impressed me:
"A walk along the shore of dreams,
Dreams from a Childs heart,
Where the moon reflects off the water,
Wave-less, with a whisper of wind,
You inhale, as gentle words are spoken,
With a sensitive tongue you speak,
Drifting with a midnight ocean,
Walking with love, you are unique."
Beautiful, my friend...
Lynda
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