Why? by gentle breeze at All poetry

Dark shadows
loom
above the sweet sensation
of the resonance of laughter

Black clouds of agony
hang
over the blissful sounds
of sweet words flowing

Then

A heart stops.
A smile fades
as fire rages
within a soul

Overflowing anger
lashes out.

Fear fills her senses.
Her hand springs up in defence.

All she can hear
Is the question
Echoing,
Why?

07/11/2006

Author notes

Not about me but about lots of women and girls out there who suffer. All the best to them.

A contest entry

Poet Laureate of all AP for the year 2007 Contest # 87 at The Winkler by Andantino. 875 points, ended January 12, 2007, 65 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I just want your personal best. by disparate. 900 points, ended February 20, 2007, 55 entries
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Please tell me what you think

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disparate
February 20, 2007

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This was really powerful, that fear in that situation and just wondering why it happened, what you did, why there's anger.. it's a hard situation.

This really brought me into the story and enfolded me in emotion, there was a sense of desperation and questioning, and anger. Well done.

Thanks for taking the time to enter this in the contest, best of luck. I also apologize for the length of time it took me to judge and comment.
R S Adams Jr
December 31, 2006

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full of feeling
WHY? is a constant question and one which will never be answered.

In this world there are horrible things that happen...to males as well. Where can we get our understanding of this? I do a little in my religion.

I know that we are promised a safe harbour, but I know that trip is full of danger and trouble. The are few quiet seas on which to travel to experience of life. I have to deal with the negatives and get on with it, as cruel as that seems.

The poem is well written. It displays a lot of emotion which I can feel myself. The image is quite alive and conjures sad thoughts.

You words are so well chosen and your verse is very well broken up into chunks of meaning.

Peace to You

Richard
tender-butterfly
December 13, 2006
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What can I say........This is a really good poem...

Your choice in words proved to be a huge factor in this writing, since it is short yet so profound...
You have managed to capture the essence of the "why" wonderfully...

Well done and good luck in the contest...
Sandi Alford
December 9, 2006

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Very Good!
It doesn't take a long flurish of words to bring an alarming picture to mind. You've proven that wonderfully here. Each nuance flowed extremely well from one to next, painting the scene in front of my eyes.

Indeed why?
It's staggering just how many put up with cruelity and abuse. Or to think they can't escape it. A hard topic to write about, but you've done a great job of it.

Let the ink flow!
Blessings Sandi
Precocial
December 8, 2006
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This poem is absolutely beautiful. I love the style and everything about it.
ThankfulSoul
December 8, 2006

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This is good. Great poem. I like the flow of it. It speaks truth and it is powerful. Keep up the writing.