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That Day

Remember that day
We journeyed the hours,
And flew across the land?

The ocean splashed against the sun,
Sol rained down a warming glow,
The emerald trees danced with joy,
And the waters jumped with glee.
 
You never knew,
But it was all for you.

Simple touch was endless bliss,
Simple words were plain beauty.
 
When fear coursed through my body
I would squeeze your arm,
And your grip matched my own.

Your eyes were a soft serenity
I would wrap up in,
Cuddle up in,
And ease was put to my worries.
 
Each sojourn
A moment etched in my mind,
For the rest of time 

You took care of me,
You spent time with me,
You kept me company,
You loved me,
So I would like to think.

 I trusted you,
I followed you,
I kept you company,
I loved you,
So I like to think.

May the moon follow the sun,
And years pass as they must; 
That day will always stay
Forever 'till all is done.
 

 

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  • Easy Assumption
    March 23, 2007

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    This poem doesn't connect with me as viscerally as your last one, but it still captures some nice sentiments. Sol rained down a warming glow- I like the image you're going for, but the way its worded seems a bit disjointed.
    Seems you've been struggling with something... a recent break up? Or an old one?
    It has been awhile. We should catch up some time.


  • Touchof1der silver member
    January 15, 2007
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    What lovely thoughts you have captured here. You have such a way of bringing emotions to the surface and surrounding them in an aura of romance and tenderness. I like this.
    ♥ Touchof1der


  • ebaby
    December 11, 2006
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    interesting poem,


  • grannyeri gold member
    December 8, 2006
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    That day is one that you will remember always - easy to read and understand the lines in which you have expressed your sentiment so well - Just wondering if there was a reason the line I trusted you was indented? Seems that it's just a typo...


  • knitonepearlone
    December 8, 2006

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    From the Heart

    whoever you wrote this for must be beaming with delight. It's a beautiful expression of your love. A joy to read. Thanks for sharing.


  • autumns ashes
    December 8, 2006

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    I think you have perfectly captured what it feels like to be in love with this poem! I love the lines:

    'When fear coursed through my body
    I would squeeze your arm,
    And your grip matched my own'

    The title suits your poem very well, I like to think that love and its essence can be captured by looking at one simple day together, and that moment never ends

    Amazing


  • masterblaster gold member
    December 8, 2006

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    Hi, a pretty and romantic write, I will not do an indepth critique as lately I have learned that people do not wan't to hear where there poem could be improved for example on flow,word usage,grammar etc, the negative replies I have had back have put me off at the moment, yes I enjoyed the feel of this poem as I said a sweet and romantic read, all the best, Di


  • LadyUnique silver member
    December 8, 2006

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    beautiful yet i feel sadness in this.
    your phrasing is refreshing... like
    'Your eyes were a soft serenity
    I would wrap up in,
    Cuddle up in,
    And ease was put to my worries'
    to me those lines are soothing and hold a security rare.
    good writing


  • Alexander van Kuik
    December 8, 2006

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    See previous titles...

    Really, this poem is so beautiful. Romantic, expressive, and really really touching.
    I thank you for giving me the chance to read it.


  • Alittle2lost
    December 8, 2006

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    that's beautiful. that is love, in it's truest, purest form. it's a beautifully painted picture, abstract adn simple. I adore it, wholeheartedly. Bravo

  • Bad Bill
    December 8, 2006

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    Exhilarating

    This is a wonderfully uncomplicated love poem, beautifully expressed--a definite pleasure to read. Well done.
    Bill

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