A thin gold chain;
Hangs around my neck
This gold cross,
That will keep me away
My lover,
The vampire
A seducer,
In the darkened alley
I see his black cape
In the shadows,
My trembling hand
Reaches up...
To touch this golden cross,
As I reach to hold it
I drop it to the ground
And take his hand,
The hand of death
and walk
Into his vampire fold~
Author notes
Ummm not one of my better ones
Hope you all like it
Susan~`
Written May 18th, 2003
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Ohh! You can have me! Wow! Surely taken my breath away! *gulp*
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No need to thank me for the reads. It is all my pleasure. I really enjoy them. You are so talented. Ty for reading mine. I just startedposting tonight.You chose the perfect pic for this one. It makes me want to grab onto his hand as well! ~Juanita~
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short but excellent I like your back ground.
DimishedFaith -
i like how you chose to go with the vampire and not the cross. nice write.
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THE BEST, the movie kicks ass, an this poem is my favorite
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Awesome
I love this and the pic~ OMG~ This was an awesome write and I was drooling from the pic alone~ What a stunning image to go with the poem~ Keep them coming and so look forward to more~ Big hugs
and much love~ Desire 
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i am getting kind of hungry *licks her lips and reveals her fangs* i love the pic too. *maybe that was why i was licking my lips
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i am off to read another one of yours.
keep it coming!!!!!!!!!!
-queen of the damned -
If this isn't one of your best, then I can't wait to read more. I thought this was very well written. Dark, edgy, eerie. Beautifully expressed. Love the picture you chose to go along with it.
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first of all, that's a good movie. second of all, brad pitt can be really awesome and very handsome. third of all, once i saw the word "vampire" i had to see this poem. and fourth of all, i'm not suprised about how amazing it is. hehe. good one.
-jey -
I vant to suck your blud!
hugs,
jim -
You have a way with these vampire poems.. you do them so well, well the way i like them anyway!
Barb
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I felt like I was walkin through that alley... I dunno... there was some great imagery here... I think if you added on, elaborated and expanded a lil more this would be no less than astounding!
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Good one, Sis! I liked it!!! I've always had a weakness for good-looking vampires myself.
MMMmmm...eyes that mesmerize!
Luv Ya,
< 3 Maureen
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Ohhhhh, ummy. Love the words with the pic. Louis is so beautiful.
Roury -
I don't really like horror poem. but this chang my mind because i really did like this that is for sure. I think that i might like to meet one if they are that good looking HAHA. I think that you really did a grand poem here my friend. thank you so much for shareing it
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Well if you really have to take a vampires hand, you sure did pick the best looking one!!!! LOL I mean really...would it be all that bad??? Hehehehe
Nice work Susan!!!!! ~Laura
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Susan..i like your dark poems as of lately
"Very cool" indeed!
Loved that movie.. Mr. Pitt was in too! hehe
Didnt know you had such a darkside girly
But you did a great job on this!
What's Our Susan been up to lately? LOL
Keeping late hours with the vamps..hehe
Becareful ..you might not want to come back LOL
Wonderful writing Hon* Love this one!
HuGSSSSS to ya!! ~Mina
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Girl wot you on lately with all this eerie writing???
LOL!
Something darkly sensual about a vampire me thinks...
Love the piccie, and the write...
Hugs. ~ Ce
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May not be one of your better ones, but I damn sure liked it. Very very very well done. Of course, ya skarin the hell out of me with all the darkness ya writing.
Then again, it seems you have found a new genre to write in, and there's NEVER anything wrong with that. Sometimes, we writers just need a change of pace and gears to keep our muses flowing (especially when the little buggers all go on strike at the same friggin time). Love Ya girlie.
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Yeah, I love the move "Interveiw with a Vampire", as do I this poem. Both very....uhh....whats the word I am looking for. Dark and artistic.
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Very dark with the macabre mixed in perfectly.
Working with words is a gift that you definitely have a handle on.
Good stuff here for sure.
WSD -
oh whoo hoo...I would have went into the folds myself hehehe. Awesome job on this one. Exploring your dark, ghostly side lately hehehe. Love it
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I don't know where your head has been lately LOL, but you're coming up with some really good poems! The "eyes" are sooooo eerie, but he is quite a hunk
This is haunting and well expressed. Great job
~Kathy -
Susan, oh my, this is amazing!!!!! I love the vampite movies:)
That brad Pitt, yummy thats one of my favorite vampire movies:) You are really good at these:)
Love ya,
Karen
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i like this one too, susan!
quite the sensual write here!
course, i've never been under a vampire's spell...
yet...
hehehe
blessed be
mike -
Awww, Susan, have corrupted you and lead you into the dark world with me like i so want you to be?
I hope so, This is great..I really like it. Post more pls, i know you have millions in your "unposted" stash
~*Lynn*~ -
OOHHH I'd interview him any day.. mind you couldn't understand a bllod word he said in "Snatch" lolololol :P
Loved this mysterious piece.. and yeah it's good to see you branching out into the darker realms of your poetry.. well penned
~GILL~xx -
Biting!!!
Hi Susan
As you know Vampire writes are close to my heart This is dark and sensual. I like this very much. I see a sequal in here. Maybe an continuing piece, or a story! I would love to read more Well done Susan! Thank you for sharing this dark tale with me v"""v
~Johnny -
That guy is so handsome isn't he...Brad Pit reminds me of a new version of Robert Redford. Lasting talent. This was not too bad susan, I am so glad you didn't talk about blood too much. Wheeeew I would have to say for a vampire poem this is one of the best.
Red -
Love your poem!! Interveiw with the vampire, struck me deeply!
"Louie, wanted death, instead he was given a never ending life of sadness!" Love your poem! -
Interesting poem, not your normal stuff and I love to see writers stray away and experiment...this gave me shivers and right before bed time too...hmmm...oh the dreams I'll have...hugs...love Ro
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Cool, write, Susan! Vampires are such sad and romantic figures in folk tales... love the piece. You captured that elusive essence of the vampire!
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Thanks hun for the comment
I almost didnt post it
So glad u liked it
Blessings
Susan~ -
awesome
I love this one!! I normally would not tell someone dead and good looking this but...this one time I will...He could "bite me" anytime...Grrrrr! Great job...Will there be a sequel? The suspense is killing me... Ray of Sunshine
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