Thus I see you , smiling like you do
indeed I feel you being just a friend true
I feel enraged that I am only included as a friend
I am excluded from your caring love even now in the end
yet you beckon and hither I come
I have denounced all others , except one
feeling deluded by your eyes and smile
extreme change in my heart all the while
I cried knowing we could only be friends
tears like a black feather insanity descends
madness for i'm only happy when you feel so
collective thoughts ... should I go?
I operate upon your words your demands
what is this jive will I make amends?
Galvanize my heart and puncture my eyes
this occasion has passed ... it is time
love lost ... love of a friend
how could I be so blind ... of what now ends
Author notes
FATAL D IS WIKED
A contest entry
- Three choices :O by Fatal D.
325 points, ended January 5, 2007, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - best everything by sociaL IntollErance.
300 points, ended November 5, 2007, 34 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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wow i can relate to this. How friends at times cant choose to be more than just friends.
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great write Brent!!!
me loves it!!!!!!!! -
heartbreak
heartbreaking of how friends love each other and never know whether it's best to just stay friends or become more...i guess in more ways than one we've been throught this tragedy...congrats on your trophys...this is a great piece. -
this is amazing i can relate to this so much
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Awww....
I love this one.
You did great on this one. *smoochies you on the lips* -
i like this one more!
the more i read... the more i like!
.... nice write!
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Aww... So sweet and beautiful, but still so sad!!! This was an amaaazing poem, keep up the good work, and good luck in the contest!
Peace out!
Cassie
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i love it
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I L.O.V.E. LOVE IT!!!
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hey cuz!!!!! love the new poem.... i havn't writin any myself l8ly... writers block.. GAHHHHH... anywho's who's this 1 about? Love Yah Cu
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this is a really good poem
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Aw, that is sad What a lucky girl that you like her so much, I wished boys wrote poems for me like that. I'd be all a-flutter and blushing
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oh my god!
Bravo!!
absolutely magnificent! and here i was thinking nobody would be able to write a poem from option 3... that is simply amazing.. and absolutely what im looking for.. thankyou for your entry
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