Weary I walk this wintry night,
snowflakes falling so pure and white.
Leafless branches covered by frost,
etched in my mind become embossed.
My spirit broken; so contrite,
weary I walk this wintry night.
All promises made now seem lost
and must be found at any cost.
These dreams of mine twisted and tossed,
are like the paths, they're all crisscrossed.
Weary I walk this wintry night,
to get to you my one true light.
My love for you will ne'er exhaust,
you see my dear we are star crossed.
With miles to go to my white knight,
weary I walk this wintry night.
Joyce Le Lievre
(sunny day)
December 7, 2006
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Author notes
Form: Quatern
Stanzas: Four Quatrains
Moving Refrain Line: A capital letter in any rhyme scheme represents a repeat of the first corresponding line. Thus, every (A) in this poem is the exact same line. Even though it is a capital letter; the (A) still rhymes with every (a) in the poem.
Rhyme Scheme: Aabb aAbb bbAa bbaA
Meter: 8 syllables or tetrameter
"these woods are lovely, dark and deep
but I have promises to keep
and miles to go before I sleep
and miles to go before I sleep"
Robert Frost...
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great rhyme, the type i like, the non-cheap lol (which means rhymes like "too" and "you" or "cry" and "why"
Well you get my point :-)
First stanza is very well written.
i didn't know about the style, i guess it involves the repetition of the first line of first stanza in the other ones. I like it :-)
i did enjoy reading it. the imagery and flow was pretty nice. A pleasure to read.
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Alba, Thank you for the applause and your lovely words of praise. The quatern is noted for a refrain line that repeats throughout carrying on to the next line in each of the following three stanzas. I'm very happy that you enjoyed this one. Love and God bless, Joyce
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A lovely quatrain you have written here - remember reading the Robert Frost poem in school - and I think we all had to memorize it as well. Great rhyme scheme you have followed so well, easy to read and understand what is going on here. Lovely presentation as well.
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eri, I want to thank you for the lovely words you have given to me here. OMG how I remember this one. Though I can't recite the poem any longer by heart. LOL
I'm very happy that you enjoyed this. The quatern is nice in the sense that it has the moving refrain line which gives it more power and there are only two rhyme schemes in it. It seemed to work well with the subject matter and I hadn't done one in quite some time. Your compliments are very humbling. 
Love and God bless, Joyce 
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This is nice.
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Cherokee, Thank you for the applause and your lovely comment. I'm very happy that you enjoyed this. Love and God bless, Joyce
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nice poem Joyce
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Michael, Thank you my dear young friend, both for the applause and your lovely words. I'm very happy that you enjoyed this winter's tale. Love and God bless, Joyce
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SO VERY SWEET!
Such a sweet and tender poem my dear friend, such a cold walk one takes to be with the one they love. Enchanting
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Your words are a blessing
Kevin, Thank you so very much my dear sweet friend, both for the applause and your lovely words. It warms my heart to see them here as they are inspiration to me. Love and God bless, Joyce
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DEAR JOYCE
Your wonderful poems always does the same for me, they always make me feel so relaxed and at peace. You are always so sincerely welcome my dear friend.
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Just beautiful, I felt like I was there with you out in the snow. Excellent write and good luck in the contest
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Theresa, Thank you so much for the applause and your lovely words. They are very inspirational and I'm very happy that you enjoyed the piece. I do love Robert Frost. Thank you for the best wishes also. Love and God bless, Joyce
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this was great, golden, and just amazing, you have done well with the pen on this one, i loved it, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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Aaron, I want to thank you for the lovely words you gave to me here. You are always so supportive and encouraging. Thank you for the best wishes also. Love and God bless, Joyce
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Beautiful Quatern
SUch a lovely form is the Quatern especially when beautifully written, as is this one! You mingled love with the beauty of Season in this refreshing write!
TY so much for your lovely entry!
Lynda
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Lynda, Thank you and Rich for hosting. Thank you for the applause and such lovely words to me. I do love Robert Frost and when I saw that quote, one of my favs I might add
I knew I had to do something for that and I haven't done a quatern in a while. I thought it would work well with the quote I went from. I'm very happy that you enjoyed this piece. Love and God bless, Joyce
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Wow!
I wish you don't have to walk weary in the wintery night, for you knight and shine comes to you knocking at your door. It's very beautiful and I can find the warmth in the wintery night in this poem. Very very well done and Good Luck in the contest. -
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Bitter Candy, Thank you for such lovely words. This write was based solely on a quote I chose from the contest. I just put my own story to it. I'm very happy that you enjoyed it and thank you for the best wishes also. Love and God bless, Joyce
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Amazing, as always!
Yes, I know I have been AWOL. Busy with everything else in this life but poetry. Maybe I'll come back to writing soon. This poem caught my eye because of its title. I correctly assumed that it would have at least some inferences to Robert Frost (is that the right author?) You've done a lovely job effectively using the line throughout the poem per the structure rules. You always do so well with these love poems. I'm sure it only reflects the amazing relationship you have with your man.
My only concern is your line "like story book lovers, star crossed". The meter doesn't match with the rest of the poem. I had to count the syllables to see that it did match, but it still didn't sound right when I read the poem out loud. I know that quaterns do not have to be iambic. I only bring it up because the line stands out.
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Deb, My dear sweet friend, it has been a long time and I have neglected your work as well. You did get the author right. The contest had a number of quotes to choose from. I know that line is bugging me too.
I am trying to think of something to replace it with to flow better. 
I knew you would catch it. It was so good to see you here. Thank you for the lovely words and I will be around to visit you soon. Love ya my friend, Joyce
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I love the flow it was very classic and deep
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Aurielle, Thank you for the applause and your lovely words. I'm very happy that you enjoyed this piece. I love the quote by Frost and when I saw this contest I had to write for it. Love and God bless, Joyce
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