Behind Your Mask
Beyond what everyone sees.
Deep within you,
there is more to just
what you show.
Blackened soul.
Death craving.
With a cold stare
and frozen heart.
Immune to their words.
Angered by actions.
Disgusted.
Disappointed.
Breaking yourself
to hide your truth.
Denied the power,
without a life
of your own.
Destruction left
in the wake of your footsteps.
Shadowed by
your own being.
The mask you wear
is all that you see.
Hiding behind
a fake smile.
Beyond the surface
lies the truth,
beneath your blanket of lies.
Pushing forth
upon the emptiness
that resides within.
Trying to hide
that which you have become.
We see
what you so carelessly conceal
behind your mask.
Author notes
This was inspired by a few songs that I heard that happened to spark a muse in me...This is not a personal write
In a list
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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very dark... I loved it. I really like poems where they talk about masks, this one is by far the best one yet. It's really well written and the emotion is very strong. Good job, keep writing.
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this group must be pretty dark ... you write a lot of it... well done on this one... i hope you can see past the mask in all things that you do
cheers
jen
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WOW!
Lil brother this certainly is nowhere near your norm to say the least.
I must admit I am glad to hear this is only music inspired and nothing more. Had you not placed that in the comment I might have thought there was much more to this piece thus you would have been receiving a phone call from me to check up on you
Excellent!
Love.
Ya big Sis Bel
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This is very good, I do hope it's only the music that sparked your feelings and nothing else.
I love you
Elizabeth
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yes my love, it was only inspired by lyrics...nothing else...I love you
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WOW
This is an amazing and very dark write, i love the flow of emotion you have here, it really draws the reader in. And your words paint such vivid pictures, this is just an Excellent write!
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Oh righteously cool dark piece! I LOVE it! *grinI
I wish you all the very best in this contest..have I said totally cool write?!?!?!?
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beautifuly dark
well done, I liked this alot,masks are something we all hide behind, smetimes they are small and fragile able to break with the right touch, but this one seems to be hard and thick skined but askew,letting us peek at what may lay beneath. well sone and good luck in the contest..
Krystal
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A mask something we all hide behind.
Encore!!!!
Teresa
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I've always loved the idea of masks. .how they can be so beautiful, so colourful, creepy, sad, erotic et cetera. I've always thought. .can your mask show who you are? Or at least your favourite colour or pattern. .or perhaps give frame you into a stereotype by the kind of mask you wear. I like the ending to your poem though. I've gathered that the mask you write about is one that is completely contradictorial to ones character and you can see right through it. . .that makes me sad. As mean as I am to phony people, I really do feel sorry for them.
I don't know if I like the shortness of some of the lines, like
Deep within you,
there is more to just
what you show.
Seems like it could all be one line and the breaks seem a little akward. .but what do I know? Have a good night anyways.
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You've done very good Master Ktulu
Music can be a inspiration in dark poetry that's for sure...
The best of luck to you in the contest!
Kari
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This is a great poem kiddo. I feel there is something different in the feeling of this dark piece. There s an air of regret or great disappointment here. You have penned your emotions well. Great job kiddo.
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Oh My Brother!!
This jjust isn't your normal style bro
All that love I have been honored to witness and this hmmmm however has prooked this write is someone that has obnviously touched a nerve or 6 well expressed Brother K
Love and Light,
rother Blaze
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thank you Brother Blaze for you comment, although I must say "Blame it on the music"...hehehe A few verses and words that sparked a bit of muse to me...
Brother K
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