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au fond

Au fond de toi les souvenirs d’une guerre qui lasse
Et peut-être que je pénètre ton être par voie mentale
Rappelles-toi  les années secondes, les minutes fécondes
Rappelles-toi mes bras qui t’enlacent
Jadis
Vas-t’en
Tu me manques
Mais j’t’emmerde
Au fond de toi les rires frustrés, les actes manqués,
La pagaille qui enlise, la fureur d’une traîtrise
Et j’me moque d’un grand tout qui ne vaut rien
Et j’m’inspire d’une rage qui s’maintient
Au de fond de moi
Quand je reviens du fond de toi.

Je t’embrasse…

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just some angst in french...

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  • N0sferatu
    January 3, 2007
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    That's why I hate not being painfully in love, not being somewhat depressed or lost between two crashing tsunamis, I hate not being able to write such great words, so simple yet so powerful and intense.
    Great one amigo.

    Elie


  • Necromantic Snow
    December 17, 2006

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    think you could translate fot me? the sounds the words make sound amazing, but unfortunately i don't know any french. =/


    • sarajevo
      December 19, 2006
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      well to be honest it's kinda very straitforward so a translation would just kill it but i can tell you what it's about and well, it's just my angst towards a certain someone and we had a good thing together that had many complications and it's kinda my confusion and rage about the subject...doesnt look that good anymore but anyways thanks for your comments


  • tragedienne
    December 10, 2006

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    Oh wow. This is pure perfection. First of all, I wish I could speak French like that. lol It's the perfect language for this poem, I don't think it would sound as good in any other language. I fell in love with your imagery which is funny because it's quite straight forward and I'm usualy a big fan of the abstract. But this... It quite simply made me speechless and the ending totally did me in. This is the best poem I've read all day. Amazing.


  • Apsinthion
    December 9, 2006
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    im honestly out of words serge...

    wow..

    ~rana~





  • No deliverance
    December 7, 2006
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    Euh....
    Enno at the fear of being redundant...I am gonna say...this is beyond beautiful...
    Just too much intense emotions...
    Love or the non-love makes you so alive that you feel your emotions flowing so wildly in your veins...

    You are amazing!!

    ~Hana~


  • XFaLLen-StarX
    December 7, 2006
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    its ... medre kif .. !!
    it kinda hurts.. medre kif .. and now i feel all medre kif .. !!

    "too much heaven, too much hell, too much love and too much pain" ..

    me.. (out of words)
    xxx


  • less than a poet
    December 7, 2006

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    oh my GOOOOOOOOOOD

    wow serge glad to see that your back and your back bi2uweh kamen this is soooooo beautiful i can actually feel it great words from a great person (although i dont know you but well i know about you )

    Tu me manques
    Mais j’t’emmerde
    Au fond de toi les rires frustrés, les actes manqués,
    La pagaille qui enlise, la fureur d’une traîtrise
    Et j’me moque d’un grand tout qui ne vaut rien
    Et j’m’inspire d’une rage qui s’maintient
    Au de fond de moi
    Quand je reviens du fond de toi.

    Je t’embrasse…

    loved it ...


  • Nour Beydoun
    December 7, 2006

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    pretty strong.. I'm not going to say it chocked me, cause it didn't.. I'm just happy you're letting it out on paper, with words.. you keep on surprising me..

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