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My Mind

I hide here
in my lil world
where evil
cannot roam
trying to find
a happy place to
make my way back home...

My mind
a mass of confusion
now every things
a race
my mind it is whirling
I cant keep with the pace...

The horror
and confusion
that spins onward
through my brain,
makes me really wonder
am I going insane...

I do OK with someone
but I'm incomplete alone...

This world
is so cold,
when your out
there on your own....

My dreams,
they are nightmares
to which I always see..

At night
in my bed,
awake, I dream...

My mind
it does wonder
and I'm always
so confused..

How to make it stop,
so I may speak to you
to tell you what
I'm thinking
to tell you what
I feel...

I wake up in my bed
at night with memories
unfulfilled...



If I don't
respond fast enough
I'd swear the dreams
will drown me...

I hold tight
to my sheets
as my dreams
seem true...

My heart
is beating
and so confused ...

My dreams it
seems they
are a fright...

I wake up screaming,
some nights...

I know these things
I dream, they cannot
be real...

But how do you ignore
the emotions you feel...

I am alone
in my little world
where evilness has
taking me...

The path towards
home has forsaken me...

My mind
is in charge now
we're headed
for the line...

If I don't make it,
I'll be forever lost
in my mind...

The peaceful place
I dream of ceases
to exist...

Were swallowed
by dreams and
worries to which
I have lived...

They tell me
it gets better,
I wonder is
this true,
for if it
doesn't get better
I'll be lost to you.

Author notes

This poem if you cant tell is about the dreams and the horror and anxiety I feel when I wake at night from having them my heart is racing I'm confused...it takes me awhile to remember where I'm at...Hope you enjoy it ...As Always Frances I HAVE CHOSEN OPTION 2.

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  • Heavens Child
    May 1, 2007

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    I like this, it has a great flow to it. It's something that probably alot of people can relate to, and that's the great thing about writing. Great job and thank you for the entry in my contest.


  • love my jose luis
    April 17, 2007

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    For free verse this has awesoe flow, that's always something that you have to be careful about when doing free verse is you have to look out and make sure your flow is ok. I think that you did a great job doing that with this piece.
    ~Alix


  • AutumnsFlame
    April 8, 2007

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    Hmm... nice poem... it mirrored the whole anxiety and how it is and stuff... I get anxiety sometimes, but not severe... my girlfriend gets it WAYY bad though, she has attacks when I'm on the phone with her and calls me in the middle of the night cuz she gets terrible nightmares... so I kinda know how it is for someone to go through all that, though I have never expirienced it myself...

    Critiques on the poem: I think it could use more imagery, and put a sentance on the same line... it's just easier to read that way... otherwise, good job and good luck!


  • Whispering Winds
    December 8, 2006

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    Very well written

    Dear Frances,

    Wow, I have to admit, this one of the best poems I have read by you. You have done a wonderful job expressing how you feel and the emotions you are going through. The flow was perfect.. You really drew me into this one.

    Much love my friend,
    Tammy


  • ExpectingMommy18
    December 7, 2006

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    this is a really good poem and i hope you do well in the contest..i loved the ryming in this poem alot!!


  • hopefull august
    December 7, 2006
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    i realy ike this. its simple and powerfu

  • jockchick
    December 7, 2006
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    I like it

    But i wonder, do you really feel that way, or do you escape into your little poetry world when your writing? Is it your emotions or emotions you bring out with bottled up depression? Because I know that i can write the most depressing poem, and not feel a thing. Do you feel it?


  • undyingservent
    December 7, 2006
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    it's definately a thriller, kept me going i like it alot


  • El Pescador
    December 7, 2006
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    The sound of sadness

    It's not easy to convert thoughts to words and even harder to make those words meaningful. You have accomplished both of these things and done them well. I hope that this poem is simply reflective, I would hate to think you were really so sad.

    Peter


  • yassmin
    December 7, 2006

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    that's really simple, frwarrd and truely very nice


    my mind it is whirling
    I cant keep with the pace...

    really expressive
    we all get lost sometimes
    nightmares can haunt us
    un fulfilled memories and dreams will always be there
    just ignore them
    dream new dreams
    hpe for and believe in a better tomorrw and you will get it ,amen

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