How I wish my purse heavy with paper
rather than heavy with copper.
Yet, I intend not to exchange it
for diamonds and materials, no,
but to drop it in the lap of the
poor beggar who I rushed past
yesterday, and all those times before…
How I wish to know of the peace
beyond living, yet still enjoy a breath.
Yet, I intend not to know the light
and hold a timeless secret, no,
but to impede sorrow and give
the needy a reason to smile
when my ignorance smiles at them…
How I wish that my hand were His
and not inept and irrelevant.
Yet, I intend not to change the reality
which a mortal cannot grasp, no,
but to live blind and heedless
as an equal, and wish for the perfection
longed for by a fickle mind...
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it is not what you give but how you give, so i have been told, this is delicate, beautiful and great sentiment.
you have a special heart, but if you ever watch 20/20 show you will know those begging fools make between $200-$500 per day playing on our sympathy. I was devastaded to hear this information on the media interviewing the pandhandlers.
keep having that soft heart, it will take you far in life
you have a great talent as a writer as well.
Tamara
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Philosophical
I really liked this poem.It is thought provoking and complex.I love the fist verse and the fact that you have used universally understood language.Strong unpretntious words.I also like the line "..to live blind and heedless as an equal .." Well written.
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Thanks.
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Such an interesting way of writing about the topic of wishing about things - liked the beginning - you want writing more than money; more poetry rather than more cash. I too give money to those who pan handle, especially ones that I have seen often at the same place. Great write. Good flow and sentiments well expressed in these lines.
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this is so so so so so so so goooooood!!!!!!! I loved it. You write so well, I love how you worded this. I enjoyed reading this one. Keep writing you write so well.
Ambe
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very good
i enjoyed this very much,a very good read,i mostly stick with the first title that comes to mind but if you are determined to change it then how about "wishfull intentions..?"
i dont think that i would change the poem as it is perfect to me the way i first read it great work,keep it up.
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I liked it. It's tells a tale of greediless person who is rare. I liked the words you used. The last stanza was the best. A great writes!
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WOW
What an amazing read. I loved everyword of it. Don't we all wish the same things tho. It had a wonderful flow in it only made by wonderful words. I truly think there is nothing more to add or take out because if u did it wouldn't make the poem as good as is right now. I love the background also. i think that is also perfect. Even the title made me click into it and wanna read it.
Wonderful job on this poem.
Keep it up like u have been and u will b better things
thanks for the read
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Sweet.
I picked this up as a spirtual poem, which I'm glad you didn't put it under. As I would have immediatly gone on as relgious poems... don't tickle me pink... Yet how often do I feel teh same feelings as you mentioned above. Expecially the begger one.. I get yelled at alot for talking to the beggers at the end of the roads... I don't have a lot of money to spare, yet I do give. It's... nice.. to read something with a religous tint for once that isn't just fawning... I like religious poems that don't insult those of other relgions, and that is what you've presented.. Just a vague touch.. But it's there... I loved it. Thanks for sharing
-Danneh
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Thank you very much. I don't particularly like religious poems myself, and I certainly wouldn't consider myself as a religious person. It was one of those writes that just "came out" sort of thing. As I thought about how we all want to change things for the better, it made me think about how we can't, and how maybe only a "higher power" can change the world... It was strange for me to write about this sort of thing because I'd normally consider myself an atheist, and have never included "Him" in a poem before. But I see now writing what most of us feel from time to time was a good move.
Thanks again for the very encouraging comment.
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I liked the poem, it flowed very well. I enjoyed reading it and I agree with all the wishes. I like the title I dont think that you need to change it, but is up to you. Good write and keep up the good work.
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Now this is a rare poem...
...that I can certainly eat up as the sweetest of liteary sweet rolled!! Very effective in the feeling of being so free flowing!!
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