When he tries’s drugs and alcohol,
Instead of the truth he tells a fib.
Everyone says don’t worry.
Remember, he’s just a kid!
When he goes to school and doesn’t try,
His homework he says he did.
Everyone says don’t worry.
Remember, he’s just a kid!
When he rebels against his parents,
And their relationship hits the skids,
Everyone says don’t worry.
Remember, he’s just a kid!
On Sunday morning he misses church,
And from God his head is hid.
Everyone says don’t worry
Remember, he’s just a kid!
He joins the army when school is done,
And everyone flips their lid.
He doesn’t know what he’s doing!
Remember, he’s just a kid!
Then one day he’s whisked away,
As the Army is his bid.
Were not sure about this!
Remember he’s just a kid!
In training he’s challenged daily,
Like those before him did.
We haven’t seen him forever,
What’s happened to our kid?
Now he goes away to war,
To bring freedom to another land.
Now I say to everyone
Our kid has become a man!
Humbly God we ask of you,
Keep him safely in your hand.
I will kneel and pray every day.
For the kid, who is now a man!
I am proud of him for his sacrifice,
In God we must put our trust.
I’ll pray and wait each and every day.
Till by grace he’s brought back to us!
Author notes
I wrote this after two of my nephews decide to join the army. Everyone thought they didn't know what they were doing. Know one seemed to worry about the dangers they already faced.
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525 points, ended March 6, 2008, 43 entries
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This poem portrays such wonderfully modern thoughts and underestimations of what children face each day. I congratulate you on believing in your nephews and hope for the best for them
Congratulations.
Good luck in the contest.
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This so deserved the gold. CONGRATULATIONS!!!
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Thank you, this is the first poem I ever wrote seriously. It was for my two nephews. Here is a link to the web site I started for them and other chidren/teens. www.mysupportourkids.com
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Amazing poem! It sounds so much like my younger brother. Next year he's joining the Marines, so he hasn't had to fight in any war, and hopefully never. As for the rest of the poem, he fits the bill nicely!
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Thank you Glad you liked it. My two nephews who I wrote this for have been in the Army for a couple of years now and both have been to Iraq and back (thank God). One has been to other places but can't tell us where and the other is scheduled to go to Afganistan. Please support your brother all the way and show him your love. Thank you for the Trophy. Here is the link to a web site I started for my nephews. Check it out if you like. www.mysupportourkids.com
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It really is a beautiful tribute to your two nephews ~ I'm sure if they read it ~ they will be touched ~
"Humbly God we ask of you,
Keep him safely in your hand.
I will kneel and pray every day.
For the kid, who is now a man!"
Impactful ~ of how our kids are becoming adults ~ I like the poem overall ~ but you changed format halfway through ~ is that on purpose? It gives it a unique read ~ the meter seem flawless ~ for the most part ~ I enjoyed this ~ Nice job!
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Brilliant write... This was so well written, I like the repetetive nature of this and how it changes at the end.
Thankyou so much for entering the contest.
Much love,
Emily x
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sorry forgot to applaud your great work!
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Wow
You have a way with the truth, I've seen this so many times, your words have so much meaning. Keep up the good work! Good luck in the contest!!
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love the flow in this one-with rhyming it pulled it all together and the ending was really sweet to the kid becomes a man. ♥ thanx for entering & good luck!
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Great write....we all need someone to believe in us, and pray for us when everyone else gives up. A beautiful expression. Thank you for your entry in my contest.
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i thought this was going to be about something else.
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you have 51 lines but i count only the lines you've written on. it just hits the 40 mark i beleive so ur still in. thats good for me because i liked this. i am fond of humorous poems. brings a smile to my face.(even if i dont beleive in god)
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Wonderful write! So very true, we make excuses and say the are just kids...then the day comes and they grow up and we are the ones who are not ready. We still see the little boy and have a hard time letting go.
Very impressive write. Glad I stop by to read it.
Excellent job!
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touching
this poem really touched my heart, my brother joined the Marines and i bearly see him anymore, and this poem reminds me alot of my brother, thank you for writing such a wonderful poem
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great job on this. I'm quickly becoming a fan of your poetry. the repitition in this is really powerful! thanks for posting this so we can all read this!
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oh wow
I love this, a lot! The simple statement, repeated, enforces the message contained within. And you speak such truths in this. We do write off behaviors and actions due to the childs age. I still remember my mom saying "he's just a normal boy" my response was always "could he be a little less normal then?". Great job on this, I really loved it.
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wow wow wow wow
wow. I absolutely love love love this poem. oh my goodness. its beautiful. I think it must be one of the best ones I've read so far. your good. and by the way, thank you for your comments. they were very nice.!!!
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very good poem
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Surprised me
I thought this was going to be a commentary or neglecting to raise children and the trouble they get without boundaries. Instead it shows pride in a choice young men make to sacrifice for the country.
It almost seems like two poems.
The transition seems to be when it is stated that the kid became a man.
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Wow. comparing war to drinking, drugs, all in all, teenage problems. That's an extremely interesting point of view you have there. I'm not going to try to critique this poem so much, that's how much I respect it. I gotta say, I think this poem.. yeah, it's the real deal. Nice job.
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awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww this is excellently writen tainted by pain. Well written. It goes to show kids grow up and decisions they do make.
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I like this alot. There's a good understanding of the situation, and those involved. Good job on incorparating the "he's just a kid" phrase and God. Keep up the good work!
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