Lost hope
Lost dreams
Everything gone
Within the blink of an eye
This is my life
You've done this to me
This is me leaving
My Good Bye
A contest entry
- Have Fun! by KissMeGoodnight.
490 points, ended March 23, 2007, 28 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Shorter The Better! by My Darkness.
400 points, ended July 4, 2007, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Contest~Your Choice by Dak.
600 points, ended January 16, 2008, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I agree with what Systems said, it seems cliche, yet somewhat personal. Thank you for entering my contest :]
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i feel like you are explaining yourself too much, you could have just ended this with a good bye, maybe i'm wrong... great write and good luck to you!
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Hard to comment. Seems cliche yet seems personal. Thats the problem with these poems because some things people can't state honestly yet differently than others. This is good and it's bad. I guess its a matter of prefrence. Good luck in the contest!
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this was a really great write and i really enjoyed reading this..your words were powerful and emotional and it flowed well keep writting your talented and good luck in the contest.
XTashaX -
Well this is nice and short, I like the color. Great job. Best of luck.
~Oka/KC -
haha, i love ur last 2 lines there. its like hey um. nevermind. GOODBYE! much luck
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A really good yet emotional piece
Full of emotion this. I love this. Sad and short at the same time. Keep writing.
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kewlness
This was very good. It was short and to the point. It's too bad you didn't win though, I am sad. Well great write!!! -
Very sad.
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OK. Now I've read more than a few of your poems. Cookies for you. I see talent here. My only suggestion is to not short yourself. Sometimes, I get impatient and just write some words down to complete my poem. Maybe it's not noticeable to others, but I can see it and that is what matters to me. Anyway, I'm not talking about this poem here. I think this poem is just about perfect. Keep up the good work.
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Brava! Brava! (whatever that means)
Very nice. Clapping happies for you.
I like how you kept it short and all that.
Ah, you know my opinion on this.
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Good poem gril
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