as i look over this water
i think of you
in your bedroom
thinking of me,
why do i need you this way?
as i look over this water i think
do you need me too?
as i look over the water
the sun is rising over now
i think wow you would love
how beautiful this is
i wish you were sitting next to me
i wish we were free
as i look at this water
the water now pink and blue
with beautiful orange and purples
as i sit here looking at the water...
My phone rings and it you saying you wish
i was there looking over the very same water
i turn around and there you are looking at me sitting on the rocks
with my feet in the water and you smile.
A contest entry
- i need only top notch poets...do you have what it takes? by Father G 23.
600 points, ended December 10, 2006, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I HEART contests (the pun is terrible, but the contest is fun!) by SereneFelicity.
600 points, ended December 21, 2006, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I'm leaving... by Aeonna.
450 points, ended February 16, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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This is so emotional and raw with feelings that are so strong that I can visually see them
and the picture of water and sunset and love all mixed into one is very strong
great write
thanks for entering my contest
~With Love and Encouragement in everything that you do~ NoTears2Dry -
nice..
but I think you could have added much more detail...you could have just started the beginning of something extremely extroardinary...
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