Live with me and be my love,
Let us make a season of love,
With the melodies of breeze,
And the dances of trees.
Let us greet the velvet fields,
Where the dreams of ages yields,
Watch them my dear, the waving green,
In the shades of clouds above seen.
See my hut in the smiling garden,
See not thou a place of heaven?
See how the nature sings a song,
In the shores that our eyes long.
Come closer and share your heart,
Chant deep in “Let us not apart”,
And if you wish for my love,
Come live with me and be my love.
LOVE'S ANSWER:
Here I come, my dear love,
Take my soul and save in you,
And if your love is really true,
Let us make a season of love.
A contest entry
- happy, happy, love, love!!!!!!make me feel it!:D by Xxpoison.kissesxX.
800 points, ended August 18, 43 entries
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awh, great write:] thank you for entering:]
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Just a note...you should perhaps attribute the lines: "Live with me and be my love", to their original author in an authors note...you have made a lovely tribute to the original and your images are beautifullly rendered. Even the two voices are quite well composed. You have much talent ...Peace, Rhonda
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I love this poem. Just beautiful.
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excellent!!
wow!!! so cool poem!! you used lovely and perfect words to describe your feelings... this shows how telented you are, cause expressing feelings as what they really are, is very difficult!!
i really enjoyed reading this piece, cause your words are transmitted to the readers like if were them the ones writing...
this work show how gifted you are and how creative and imaginative you are...
that's something great, cause only great poets can make you feel what they did, you are very good at this!!!
also, the selection of words you did, id completely perfect, as each of them, express a bit of this feeling...
my favourite lines are:
"Live with me and be my love,
Let us make a season of love,"
cause this words are the most expressive of the whole poem, they show exactly how you feel...
keep writing like this, up to the good!!
see my work if you can!!
good luck int he contest!!
kisses!!
"Do Magic"
just me...
(* pau
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... te amO principitO
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If this is what heaven...
...is to be like ....I'm there, wait for me!! I'm on my way over!!!
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