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Just an escape, not a rescue.

Rain on me
You stars I see
I need your peace
To overwhelm me
But you're nothing
You can't rescue me
So I'll
Proceed
To scream.

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Been feeling semi-inspired, but have done almost absolutely nothing with that inspiration in terms of turning it into anything semi-well-written, so it's frustrating. What's up there is basically the extent of my creativity these days.

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  • Periwinkle Blue
    December 5, 2006

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    It's fine... this poem is a yell for help!

    Come with me and we shall write a poem together!
    A second stanza:

    My life is twisted
    in such ways...
    I can't be rescued
    in such ways as stars
    can ever do!
    I need sweet, enduring love
    from someone fine, like you!