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the death of innocence

i may be a bit reckless

who's to say whats too hardcore?
why don't you say what you really think

and just call me a whore

 

you think i'm disillusioned

and i'm being used for fun

but really now i must confess

that i am the using one

 

i'm that drop of chlorine in your eyes

that make them bleeding red

i'll kiss your velvet lips

and then i'll lay you down to bed

 

i'll be the breath of ecstasy

warm on your flawless skin

i'll bring out the savage lust in you

thats burning from within

 

i'll be the gasoline

that's feeding your internal fire

i'll be the little secret

that fulfills your every desire

 

i've got you now and you're all mine

its too late to repent

i've got one more point for the whore

the death of innocence

 



 

Author notes

i used word bank B, i hope you enjoy my write

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  • arezes mom
    August 15, 2007
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    yes...

    this is true paople label and i am one of those who are. i had my death of innocence when i was 10 i was tricked by an older boy and let down. i love your writing style its so unique!!!!
    i hope you write more like this!!!!

    your friend
    missey anne marie aka lil skittles 666


  • lovingwife
    December 13, 2006
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    good

    this is a very hard core peom. i really like it though. great write


  • demon bunny90
    December 9, 2006
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    me loves

    this is a wicked write. very discriptive, i like that and the sceem is great. although i can only assume the message being sent the words draw me in and without a 100% clear point it allows my mind to wander.
    good stuff,
    demon bunny


  • DevonJM
    December 6, 2006
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    Its always my luck to find your latest work in a contest Dropped in to see your work, and thats rather well done. Hope you are well dear, take care.

    Devon

  • the chase
    December 6, 2006

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    I usually don't like rhymes but the way you wrote this really didn't bother me. The imagery and the word choices leave the reader with a picture as well as an emotion. Thank you for entering

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