Layered in sacred cloths
she communes with the moon
they are as one
soaking in each other's
vibrations
her face shadowless
in the peak of lunar glow
she sits balanced
embracing all that is
deepening her breaths
as they lay the fire
in the box canyon
heart beat slows
she revels in the power
washing in waves
they place the bitter
upon her tongue.....
it is her path to swallow.
Author notes
Option 5
graphic found at: http://www.purplemoon.com/Stickers/fantasy-flowers.html
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A contest entry
- Wolfspiritguide and PerfectImperfection: Contest to Thrill! by wolfspiritguide.
525 points, ended December 16, 2006, 17 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Gentle Soothing Fantasy by Dream Drifter.
432 points, ended May 14, 2007, 10 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - enter the realm of the mystical by Uniquely-Scarred.
475 points, ended November 18, 2007, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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What I read in your words is alot of hard work, I got alot of good out of this write. and I would like to thank you so much for posting it in my contest.
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Incredible
Merry meet,
Congratulations on winning the Gold. This is a truely inspirational piece, especially in conjunction with with the picture you chose. As far as changing anything or a different word choice.....I don't think I have anything to offer to improve this.
I love your lines:
Layered in sacred cloths
she communes with the moon
they are as one
This speaks to me so much. It is the way I feel when I commune with my Goddess.
Your closing lines:
they place the bitter
upon her tongue.....
it is her path to swallow
Is true of anyone who follows ideals and beliefs not countance by society and some of the lessons that life can teach. Again, this is an incredible poem and I would be honored to add it to my lists of favorites on my Authors Page. Congratulations again on your win.
Amythest
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Thank you so much
. This is a piece that I am pleased people are finding a deep meaning in. Somewhat unexpected as this was a quick write that just came to me. I am honored that you would add it to your list, please feel free, and thanks so much.
Pennye
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Great going on the gold
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'they place the bitter upon her tongue...' very thought provoking line indicating a metaphysical journey into paths of knowing and enlightenment. grounded by fire yet arising in spirit. lovely write. thanks so much for entering and good luck.
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That last line just... moved me. This piece as a whole is very clever - and unique. Beautiful sense of imagery within the depth. To me, a sort of rebirth taking place - to accept that which you have been given. Thank you so much for entering and best wishes!
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Thanks very much Wendy, I am pleased you like this, I enjoyed writing it very much
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