politicly correct
politicly correct?
who the bunny came up with that?
this started out so good you see
oh way back when
when the maze and lies of government
mixed so well in
corruption and power
seem to be the case
of what the world thought
would forever be so great
the all mighty doller
always wins now
and lies upon lies
stack up somehow
but i want to get rid of it all
politicly correct
should never be a word
not a phrase
not a meaning
just white it on out
of that dictionary
while politions
should all go south
debate polar bears
for all i care
we just don't
want YOU here!
and that all mighty doller?
i'll burn every one
bring the world back
to in which it begun
where its not about money
maybe love and life
but who do you know
who would make
that sacrifice?
America the free!
is that not what we cry out?
America the brave!
is that not what we sing?
America...America....
the nation
the united
the one
is that not what we're about?
so let me just go shout this out!
Why is someone else
controling my life?
why do i feel like i don't have a voice?
Why do i feel like i'm being lied to?
only told one side too?
I want to understand
but no one wants to tell
America the brave
cowers back as well
Making my life
a lot more
like hell
Author notes
Sorry i have this class on American problems and i soo had to get that out of my syestem... 
Please tell me what you think
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good poem...makes me think of a few ive written criticizing the government as well. it is pretty ridiculous how america is in the modern society, and you pointed this out very nicely. the only problem i saw was that you had many spelling mistakes...i dont know if you care to fix that or not, but its just a suggestion.
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hmmm.... interesting class.... a class on America problems.... are the units on George Bush first semester or second?
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Cool write here, I agree with it all of course!
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Awesome!
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I don’t know studies have shown bullies fight because they are afraid. As to the poem it seems a little forced in places a good re-write would help it a bit. Not bad for a first draft.
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I am extremely politically incorrect. I love how you accuse America of "cowering" when they are the one who have lost more soldiers in the fight for your freedom that you obviously take for granted calling it "hell." I think you need to grow up, think for yourself and stop listening to the "political correct" liberal media and brainwashing college professors.
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hello
thanks for your criticizem. just so you know-i support the war in iraq only because there are soldiers fighting there. If we hadn't messed with that area years ago when sudam h came to power there would be less lives....lost....
but really thank you for your comment-and its good to know there are other politicly incorrect people out there!
hearts and hugs
wolfheart
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I like the way this write develops down the page here and enjoyed reading it very much. You created a nice transition from the beginning of the poem to the ending and leave the reader with a lot to think about and ponder over. Thank you for sharing and best wishes to you. Keep that pen handy dear poet. ~Midnight Lace
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thank you so much for your comment! you really made my day-this is only my 1st draft so i hope to improve it further!
hearts and hugs
wolfheart
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