Drowning in an ocean
Blood, alcohol and tears,
Knowing you’ll never be good enough,
Held down by constant fears.
The angry voice still echoes,
Telling you of all you are
Scum, useless, worthless,
A name for every scar…
Not living just existing
Going from day to day,
Trying to be perfect
While pretending you’re OK,
Every night the punishments
Will teach you right from wrong,
Stop you being so weak
Force you to be strong.
So why do you feel so bad?
If the punishments are good?
Why feel so trapped, so alone
If things be as they should?
Looking in to the mirror
The reflection merely stares,
Cannot answer your questions
Can’t provide answers to your prayers.
Sinking and drowning
Dropping beneath the sea,
Trapped, alone, dieing,
Never to be free…
Not understanding
Not knowing what is right,
Believing the excuses
Yet fearing every night.
Author notes
Meant to portray the confusion felt by one going through abuse... not knowing if it's right or wrong... thinking it to be normal, but feeling that something isn't right. Didn't work out brilliantly though...
option 3
A contest entry
- What Lies Beneath??? (A Dark Contest with many options) by Bruised.Roses.
375 points, ended December 10, 2006, 20 entries
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wow I really liked this the rhyming was magnificant and as a whole this was so very very beautiful...I can relate to this in alot of ways and feel for you......I think you are very talented and this piece is evidence of that. I liked the title and hthe last line was blunt and bold. it was persuasive and kept me reading
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This was such a great write. I can totally relate to this and understand the feeling and emotions. Your words were strong and powerful. This poem strongly reminds me of me. You are an exceptional writter and just Wow! Keep writting and don't stop. Thank you for entering our contest and good luck
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so sad i like it keep it up
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