Coffee aromas stole up the stairs and stirred.
The angle of the morning sun setting a sharp line
of light across shadows as it burst into the room.
Alarms off, she tossed her arms across the covers.
Relaxed, as she smelt the coffee and the sound of footsteps
beat a quiet tattoo, syncopated with her listening heart
She threw back the covers, felt the sun touch.
Her skin grew warm with the caress. The door,
ajar, flew open. He squinted as the sun haloed him.
He saw her. Stepped to the side of the bed. Placed
the coffee on the night stand. She pulled the shirt off.
He pulled away, as she laughed, threw the shirt at him.
The light contrasted shadow and his body was outlined bliss.
He knelt beside the bed and kissed her toes. She
was full of light. Bright joy
rising as he kissed her ankles, let
his hands slide around her smooth thighs. The night
may drift in like the tide, but mornings
burst upon the horizon, leaving
no questions. Her desire
came as quick as a wave.
Felt it wash across her
sink into her skin, light
her nerves, awaken
every cell. His hands,
each finger print clear
as it was memorized by her
cells. Then as his tongue
traced the shape of her thigh
knew the course and fire of her blood,
she felt wonder
magic gather within
her heart. His hands
on her stomach, appearing
to read all that the flutters
had to tell as his tongue ran
along her lips
tasted the rising
tide of her passions. This magic
spinning around in her brain. She feels herself
rise above all the fire that raged below,
felt him join her. Together they watched
as she and he rocked the bed
created a shift in the tides
the earth and moon
dancing with one another. She felt
the mounting passion as she felt peace
strength in the spirit of this man. He surrounded her,
he mounted her, in and out, all about she
was more than before. Suddenly,
she could see the treasure
the gift her hands held
her heart was full of
this man.
This one and no other
as they rushed
together,
waves coming together over the jetty.
He handed her a cup of coffee as he lay beside her. She was nestled against him, loving
the arm around her head, hand resting on the top of her breast. She smelt the coffee
all over again as he said, “I love the contrast of coffee against the sweetness of you.”
3:16 PM
Dec. 5th, 2006
Alexandria, VA
Author notes
I wrote this one in response to this poem. There are people on this site who keep me awash in inspiration.
http://allpoetry.com/poem/2390161
In a list
Please tell me what you think
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and again o0o0o0o damn ,
im a coffee virgin .... am i missing out on something
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Aroma therapy
I imagine that your life as enough flavors in it to ensure that what is missing is not going to make a large difference when it is coffee.
That you understand the sensuality of this piece is evident and that is what counts. Love, Tom B.
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You are a worthy opponent
This piece is very sensual, integrating the desire of the masculine with the gentle yearning and compassion of the feminine. I was going to take that path. I can see why this piece scored a half point above mine.
Best of luck in this next phace of the Poetic challenge.
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Thank you
I wanted to have a more femine aspect in this write and so i choose third person. Normally, I think first is more immediate, but it would not of allowed me to bring the femine as forward as I wanted to in this poem. It is tricky and I am always trying to improve in this area. I ain't sure why, just, that it feels right
Love, Tom B.
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Loved This
Beautiful write.. makes me want a cup of Joe..smiles
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I like mine black
This was to express joy. It is the energy of love. To tell me only what little you have is to tell me you are full of life. I appreciate the joy you have shared. Thanks
Love, Tom B.
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U8ltimate Sweetener!
The night
may drift in like the tide, but mornings
burst upon the horizon, leaving
no questions. Her desire
came as quick as a wave.
Felt it wash across her
sink into her skin, light
her nerves, awaken
every cell. His hands,
each finger print clear
as it was memorized by her
cells.
WOW!!!!! Fireworks and quivering little quirks illicited from this reader! Damn dude! You'd be dangerous to my virtue in person!!
xxoo
dk
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Ah but is the pleasure of your mind in yoru heart
I am glad to know it touched you. I like to dig deep into the sensual universe, to be intimate with my reader, to make us all a little freer to express our feelings. Thanks for all your kind expressions of appreciation.
Love, Tom B.
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This was beautifully passionate, exciting and intimate to read. You can so easily take a moment that's personal and intimate and open the doors and windows without reservation and let others experience it too. Very well done. I loved the flow of this and how the words moved through with the rhythm of the feelings expressed.
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'Tis the season to share our gifts
I take your comment as a gift. It is a wonderful compliment for me to hear how well I have shared joy with you. I feel blessed that you have loved this so.
Love, Tom B.
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Wow, look at the overwhelming response to this poem! It is truly art at its best with all the senses so fragrantly attune and such a beautiful counterpart to Lane's (you guys make great co-authors!). Not only is the physical accentuated but I found it highly spiritual. Happy Holidays! ♥ Belle
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Good Love Takes a Good Spirit
We all long to be transformed, transported by the touch and joy of our loves. When we are able to be present -- here and now -- with the one we love, we are available for spiritual ectasy. When the same is true for our loved one, we can experience the moments when we truly are, not just part of the all, but fundimentaly aware, in touch and in tune with it as well. Thanks for your lovely review. Love, Tom B.
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“I love the contrast of coffee against the sweetness of you.”
ahhhh bliss
this was wonderful Tom, I am however alarmed by how 'simple' this poem is in contrast to your usually grande, metaphorically eloquant language.
Anyhow beautiful as always, magical as always
you always manage to touch my heart
Rohina
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No cause for alarm
While I love my wild metaphorical mystical style sometimes it is not the apppropriate moment for it. This is in reponse to someone else's poems and so reflects some of her style in it. Part of the reason I so miss you is the effect your delicious rich language had on me. I still remember the lips and vases image. Their was even in your most painful writing a sensual richness, a promise of deep, full expression to gift this reader if one was gentle and knocked carefully on the right door. But I am rambling.
Thanks for sharing all of your pleasure and joy with me. I always try to recieve it as the gift that it is. I drink my coffee, black, so I never miss any of it acidic blossoms.
Love, Tom B.
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very good
This is absolutely marvelous. I love it. It is so sensual, so open and free feeling. I like how you have the wakening of the new day and the waking of desire. I love the descriptiveness and imagery you created with your wonderful words. And then completed the whole scenario with a perfect cup of coffee....great job.
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Thanks for the memoires
Your reveiew sounds like you are sharing your own memories of such a lovely event in your words. May you have been so blessed. Thanks for all your kind thoughts.
Love, Tom B.
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My dear friend....you have a way of creating dreams and memories, but more than that (envy)maybe for things that were , even if only in the readers imagination (do not know about the author)You do not only write, you paint as well as direct and choreograph one step at a time.......from coffee aroma that on its own can arouse the senses, then to be followed by complete abandonment. Your words make the reader not only part of the audience (but part of the scene), yet you manage never to offendYou can take any situation or daily activity and create sensuality out of the most mondane. Wondering what you could do with a sink full of dirty dishes? Bubbles of JOY?
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BTW, did the coffee go cold or was the heat created enough to keep even that cup steaming?
created a shift in the tides
the earth and moon <----------my very favorite lines
Thanks for once again starting my day with a smile, and since it is only a bit past 4 am I can go back to bed and escape into dreaming for a bit (about a cup of coffee that is)
much love,
xoxoxoxoxoxo
reenie
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Even dirty dishes!
Here you go
http://allpoetry.com/poem/1880240
This one catches you with your hands elbow deep in the soap. Maybe it is that sweater thing again.
Life is, possibly, just what it is: an opportunity to experience all of it and become deeply sensually involved with it. But, like experiencing our own magnificence we are afraid of it and can barely take it in small doses.
Here are snow balls at yah. Take care
Love, Tom B.
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Beautiful!
Brilliant! A very good write, the words melt in my mind and the images blend before my eyes, you give passion a new meaning and sensuality a divinity. Well done! -
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Blessings
your review is a beautiful gift and resonates within me.
Love, Tom B.
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Tom, I began to read this to critique in earnest,as usual with the mandate to spot typo's that may be helpful,to make any positive suggestions,to say what particularly worked et al,however what happened was as I read I was soon so absorbed within the imagery that I had read to the end and enjoyed the piece,got lost in the moments between beginning and ending the poem...That rarely happens for me as I have such an analytical mind so this was a good piece and a delightful interlude into the joyous intimacy between the lovers,the duality was this was more tell than show but it worked as the telling was the show,much is made of form,metaphor et al and yet for me it is always the emotion within a piece that is more important than anything else and that was satiated as the poetry was vibrant with sensuality,love and light,Yvette
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Hope the heart beats strong
I know how we use the analytical mind. That this piece was able to reach past to the heart is reward enough for me. I always hope that my sensual erotica creates more than a physical response. I try gift the reader with the caring that comes with touch and how transforming and transporting that touch can be. Thanks for sharing your joy with me, for this is the greatest gift.
Love, Tom B.
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amazing!
i loved every sentence in here - this piece took me into my own world, it was very clear and the whole mood of it all is so comforting - i dont want to leave!
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Welcome to my world, anytime.
The best expression of the dynamic in love is joy. Spread your wings and fly. We are gifted by the love when we are willing to share its expression. 'til then it is merely an thought and not much happens in maybe.
Thanks for your kind words. Love, Tom B.
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Tasteful
Nice job expressing erotic desire without going over the top. Passionate without the graphic nonsense that seems to prevail in many poems on this site. Nice balance between love & passion. ~Mark
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Thanks Mark
I started writing this style of poetry because I wanted to prove that there was a better way to express the joys in erotica by deepening the sensuality. Thanks for enjoying the balance.
Love, Tom B.
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"The night
may drift in like the tide, but mornings
burst upon the horizon, leaving
no questions."
A simply soothing passage, dear Tom.
This is marvelous! Did I say "marvelous"? Yes, and that's exactly what I meant. There is nothing like the "dance" with a "taste of sugar" to sweeten the beginnings of a new day.
This is erotica with the subtleness of wonder and appeasement. Very passionate!
BEAUTIFUL
I breathed in every single, wondrous nuance.
Much Love ♥
Renee
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It is always finding the moment in concert.
I have to search through thousands to find the right one.
Thank you for falling in love with that line. It was one that I almost edited out. I had to ask if added too in a way beyond simply being enjoyable in itself.
Sensuality, touching, joy should always come together and and expressed as many ways as possible.
Love, Tom B.
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Enticing
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Joy is found in the right smile
The only dirt was taken care of my the shower that followed. There is only one concern really: How do we share joy?
Glad you could see the beauty in the moment. Love, Tom B.
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Lovely scenario and very well crafted. This comes to life with your vivid word combinations. There is playfulness, eroticism, sensory effects - and it all works so well together. Terrific title and I love the ending.
Cris
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Do you prefer cream or sugar
Glad you enjoyed this little interlude in coffee making. Next I will take on teaching the making of bread. thanks for enjoying this.
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Making bread could really get a rise out of me! LOL!
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a sweet beautiful.
these are the thoughts that so well express our very existance. Genuine. -
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A gift is a blessing for all
Thank you for your succinct comment that shows your joy in what you have received. Love, Tom B.
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Think you've been saving this one for just such a competition - with the increase in intensity, you have met the challenge. Loved the flow of this, the visuals which are so easy to see, and the comfortable way you have written this - as if you were just talking to us and telling us about your day - coffee plus. The contest is really heating up.
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Freshly brewed
Thank your for one great compliment. That I have made this feel comfortable, not common place, but something we could talk about is high praise since sex is so often verboten. If we were a mature society, we would be able to be frank and honest about our needs, feelings and activities, while at the same time be respectful, caring and thoughtful. It would be the honor and graciousness that we would gift each other with that would clarify and open far greater opportunities for trust and honesty. Again thanks as well sa my love.
Yours,
Tom B.
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OH MY! This is enchanting! I see you pulled out the Master of touch forthis one!! ME LOVES IT!!!!!! I adore your wording.. it is... I am speechless. It swept me away... to.. mmmm. coffe and toast!? I love this. Truly touched my core. Well done my friend!! I enjoyed all the way through. NEVER CHANGE ANY OF THIS. It is the way you touch a soul... as the sun does in this poem.. oh, how it outlines you perfectly... and makes me shine bright with joy You have penned a powerful one for this round, Tom. Well done. Best of luck!
Mel
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Thanks to my friend and biggest fan
Yes, in the back of my head I recognized the Coffee and Toast motif. But, I love the smell of coffee as much as the smell of sex. They are both very warm and rich and delightful. I just wouldn't want salty flavored coffee.
Love, Tom B.
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Mmmm
Tom...We are like two bookends and everything between...This is more than a compliment to my poem...it is the afterglow. Thank you, and damn,
boy, you've done it again!
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Transportation provided by
All aboard for the magical mystical tour! We are children playing by the fire all too often. We are afraid of learning all the wonderous things we truly are. We cower in front of our own magnificence. I will be satisfied when I have found away to be all I can be. So I explore and experience when possible all the transporting electrifying interpersonal celebrations I can. Along the way I am trying to grow up emotionally as much as possible and heal as well as I can.
Some one asked me why I don't do a blog. I do I guess. it is poetry and comments on AP. Silly me.
Love, Tom B.
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Other resonse ~
I did leave a response to your poem of inspiration ~ -
Sensual ~
Sensual without going overboard into the Lake of lust ~
As a gay man, I can honestly say, this is an enjoyable read which kept me glued to the monitor ~
Or it could be that I'm a pervert ~ Hmmmmm
My fav. lines..>>> as she and he rocked the bed
created a shift in the tides
the earth and moon
dancing with one another.
Anyhoos...great flow.....wonderful storyline...structure is a bit off....just my opinion...LOVE the title & backdrop...choice of chosen grammar is most....tame for you tom
However, I think you did a great job, and I do believe this write can stand on its' own to compete in ANY contest ~
Well done Bubba ~
Bear ~
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Means alot to me
I am glad that this spoke to you. I don't think it is perversion as much that all of us want the physical experience to transport us, transform us, cosmically meaningful with at least one person.
I am curious as to your complaint about the structure. Elucidate.
Love, Tom B.
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