Pink Thrill
tickled with snow flakes
spooned to the palest pastel
sitting pretty between powder
cotton candy and peppermint
dipped by dreamy flesh tips
spinning and flirting
fluffy thoughts with wavy lips
smile to the swish of the song
spreading cross a creamy tush
I giggle... eventually set
poised in memory of red and white
striking poses for dignified buyers…
thrills living pink highlife
Please tell me what you think
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imagery
subtle imagery that makes this poem a charming gem......wow..sensuous yet so decent............teh profession is clear....but so deftly made so -
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Thank you King
that was the object to talk about the profession without making it sound so trashy-smile
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I really like the relevance of this line>> 'poised in memory of red and white'. You did well here...
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excellent
Hey girl, Haven't been around lately to read your beautiful words of wisdom. I love everything you write. You are bad!! How can so much talent come from one person. Wow is all I can say!!
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You are so kind-smile. thank you so much sweetie.
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Dripping Freedom
*snap snap snap*...Crispy flow... I could dance to this. The background is perfect for the piece. You made me see a lady with your words.
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This was so dreamy...I think your word choice and metaphors were just point blank goregous
It just had the right flow...you know?
Nice job
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Excellent imagery. You bring the reader through the picture, one pastel color at a time.
Glad I stopped by.
I'll have to check out some more.
John
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This is definately a thrill to read. Love the pictures it conjured and your choice of words. Pink things. Nostalgic. Seductive. Sweet. Freak.
"cotton candy and peppermint"
I think I'll read Summore (she's funny). Oh, and I'll read you too!
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Nice Satin
I saw lots of emotion in this one, in spite of whoever-it-was down the page that didn't. To me, this poem was about memories, and anything you remember this well is certainly emotional.
Your metaphors will take a while for me to sort out, but I will read it over and over again until I get some sense about it.
For now, I can't decide whether your memory is about selling cotton candy and peppermint sticks when you were very young at maybe a...carnival? "Striking poses for dignified buyers", this line is suggestive of this.
"spreading cross a creamy tush"
Again, a very suggestive line, I will have to ponder on this one for a while.
Or, maybe you were just in a silly mood, I don't know, but I'd love to find out. The color pink itself is in a realm all its own, and could have many interpretations.
Sometimes, I have a tendency to over-think things, lol!
Loving your writing,
Brazos
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You just made me want to taste pink. Like run out and buy some cotton candy or something....lol {which I don't eat} This made me all fluffy inside. What a sweet write for the palet. Missed you Hugs~ Cuddles
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Thanks sweetness, I am just blown away that so many people seem to like this particular piece of my poetry...maybe because it's sort of a "happy" piece...ya'll got the feeling I was hopped up on a little somethin something - lol.
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i agree with exquisita, thinkin in pink is very nice...and i liked your poem, it was kinda the type of airy dont know wats going on ness that not alot of artist can create with out being annoying...
~jalisua
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I really like this one, it's very descriptive and gives a great image in the reader's mind.
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I like thinking in pink , I get a warm fuzzy feeling when reading this one...I like it
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this is really well writen and i love the way you word things threw out the whole thing! amazing job!
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Oh wow
I really like this.. I was not sure what to make of the title (Pink Thrill) I kind of thought of something totally different, but this awesome. I really enjoyed reading. Kassie.
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Breathtaking
WOW!! This was simply exquisit... I am at a complete loss of words with this one. It was beautiful and so very full of imagery... I could almost taste the shades of pink... wow!!! I can only bow to such amazing masterpieces.
Amy
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meow
such an amazement in poetry.
'poised in memory of red and white' pure word kudos to you! -
I saw so many shades of pink
folded together, and peeking out of hooded places nad boldly crossing the sunset sky, it was a pink revelation for sure...lol..Artis -
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Valuable
Your commentary was very interesting. You help me to see something in this write that I hadn't paid attention to but due to the worthy exchange of interpretation, I noticed. Thanks Artis
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This is very beautiful. I truly love this, it is lovely metaphor and flow. A truly lovely write.
Read it a few times, due to the beauty of it.
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Mutual
I like your writing style as well, truly eye catching descriptions and word usage...I finally got the time to read some of your work...so I made you a favorite.
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Brilliant
Imagery in the highest form. Brown Smoke...You;ve given a-whole-new-deep-spin to...PINK!
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Thanks
This was for a contest however, i forgot one of the rules and was immediately kicked out but thank you for wonderful compliment LadyL.
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this isn't bad, but there is not much real emotion coming at me when i read it. did you not read the rules of this contest?
NO ACOMMPANYING ARTWORK.
NO AUTHOR NOTES.
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Artwork Removed
Thanks but you say you don't feel real emotion coming from this piece...could you explain?
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Oh, you fabulous poet!
Do you know how much I love this poem? I LOVE IT SO MUCH! The colors just swirl and mingle and sweep me away and I am not kidding. Colors make me so glad and your poem is beautiful!
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You're Very Sweet
Thank you so much. I'm sure the feeling is mutual as I will be reading your work tonight. Thanks for the love.
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that is awesome
sensually beautiful and I love the visual descriptions...this is one beautful write...smile...hugs and love, David
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