Father sun awakened me
with his warm kiss and I flowered
My sister, the moon leaned in to
give me butterfly kisses on my cheek
She who is mother holds my cradle
and offers me to the world as a gift
Author notes
Picture painted by ea
In a list
A contest entry
- Creation by ea.
700 points, ended December 6, 2006, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Thank you for reading my work!
Comments
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such a beautiful piece! congrats on your honorable win! so much love and tenderness surrounds this poem in its overwelming beauty. i absolutely love it! keep on writing, poet! you have pure poetry in motion here.
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SO SOFT AND GENTLE!!!
Such tender and loving words, reading just calms me so much!
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oh wolfie...this is beautiful my dear. tender and touching, like so many of your writes
God bless sweetie.
Love Ocean
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Beautifully Inspiring...
Thank you for sharing your creative muse with all of us!!! Congratulations on the Emerald Cup, and keep it flowing!!! 
Peace, love & hugs, xx Cyn 
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Soulfully written. You've woven a wonderful story of creation and nature here. Thank you for sharing.
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This is so gorgeous, mother nature and our natural kin are so precious to our existance. Best to you dear Bandit.
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you have capture the essence of nature at its most divine
this is a wonderfully concise piece. Short and sweet but packs a great punch of imagery.
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PRECIOUS!!!!!
I have always loved Native Americans cultures, their legends, stories and beliefs.'s This sounds like one of their legends, their stories which may be told around the fire .'s
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Feel badly that you are leaving this site, and we will not be able to see your poems featured again. Please do try the library - here it is free to use with a membership. Hope you keep your page here and do try to come in once in a while. Your author page is so creative and filled with family. Commented on this before, but just wanted to drop in again and wish you all the best.
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I love the natural imagery here. Congrats on the HM and thanks for your comment on my poem
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A very flowing poem about nature and how creation came to be. Easy to read and understand, nice HM as well.
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The moon's hand rocking the cradle... I like that thought. A subtle reference to the powers beyond the perception of most that guide our lives. Thank you for creating and sharing. Take care,
AD
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Such a beautiful piece, with such depth in such few lines, i loved it Congrats on the HM too.
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Soothing
This is a very soothing peice. The picture is beautiful . lovely work
~Lisa~
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Thank you, Bejeweldone
I found the picture very peaceful and gentle, so tried to write something in that tone. Thank you for taking time to read my work.
You are very pretty!!
Wolfie
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so peaceful..
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very good
this was beautiful and i hope all is well with you mom i am now looking to the summer moons and i hope they come fast
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This short poem is very original, powerful, and vivid. I like it very much. You seem to have said exactly what needed to be said, nothing more, nothing less.
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this is wonderful! i love the adjectives the imagery is grand the cadence is smooth. you did a great job on this. keep the ink flowing God bless you
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Beautiful
This is a beautiful write. I love it so much. YOu are amazing. You never cease to keep me on my toes. I love your writing. I love them. It is breath taking. Oh I hope to read more of your work soon. God bless you my wonderful mother, sister and friend.
Tabitha
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Terrific
Mom, It sure has been a while. I haven't been on in a long while. I love this poem. It is beautiful. You write so well. I hope to check in every now and then to keep up. I have been so busy with work. This is my first day off since 20 days ago. Working straight. Well hope all is well with you. I will talk to you later.
Pikeodawg........ John
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I like it
Lovely ideas contained in this poem. I think I'd try "Sister moon" echoing Father sun - for better flow. Good job!
Anne
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A sweet poem about a child and how its mother sees it as not only a gift to herself, but to the world!
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This is very beautioful and so simply told. I especially like the part about offering the child to the world as a gift.
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very good
a very good interpretation of the given picture,great work ,good luck in the contest with this unusual and lovely poem
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this is beutiful and I agree it is true to the painting...excellent imagery and very uplifting...thanks for sharing
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this is great, i really like the words and the picture fit together, good read, keep up the good work
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Beautiful, and you ARE!
Thanking you for taking time to read and comment on my poem.
The picture is by AP poet "ea" and was a great inspiration.
hugs Wolfie
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This is a very nice poem. I enjoyed reading it and i liked the imagery. The picture was a very nice touch by the way. I look forward to reading more of your work.
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Moonlight Angel
Thank you so much for reading and commenting. This was one of those poems that just wrote itself. It is short, but I had said all I had to say. The picture is by AP poet "ea" - she is so talented.
hugs Wolfie
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Wow, beautiful! I love the imagery of the family. It's amazing that you've managed to make this spiritual without necessarily having a "denomination". What a gorgeous little pearl of a poem!
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very cool, i liked this one very much. on a personal note, a little touchy feely for my personal tastes, but a great poem none the less
Great Write and God Bless
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Poet, Ben
Thanks for reading and commenting. Consider: I am a sixty-one year lady...we just can't seem to avoid the touchy-feely... LOL! I gotta be soft sometimes.
hugs Wolfie
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Your wording was excellent.
Great revelation, and a very good poem. I am glad I read it. thanks for sharing. Keep up the great work. Best of wishes to you. good luck in all that you do....peace always in all ways. You rock....
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K.P. - YOU rock!
I am very grateful to you for reading my work and making such an encouraging remark. That is what keeps old lady poets going. Best of everything to you, dear heart!!
hugs Wolfie
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this is very lovely. I like the correlation to the painting. Thank you.
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