a confetti sky
a surprise party for me
takes my breath away
In a list
A contest entry
- The Holiday Haiku Contest by NoWayJo.
600 points, ended December 15, 2006, 43 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - haiku or short forms over age 15 please by misticmoonlite.
525 points, ended January 30, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Now this really is beautiful. The picture is so sectular and your words give it that perfect touch of excitement. Great job with this one sis.
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PERFECTLY lovely and BREAHTAKINGLY beautiful! I love this ku so much... the colors you chose and the image... just astonishingly fine with your haiku. 
Snow is like that, yes, just like that... what you said. 
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Wonderful sis. You are so good at writing a Haiku. I love this one.
Best of luck in the contest.
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beautiful work!
I
this one Sis!
Your words create such soft images, and the picture and background accompany them perfectly.
The beauty of the snow does take ones breath away.
Good luck in this contest!!
Jeannette
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Oh My Word~
Beauty of a piece You have penned Beautiful- Sis this tugs at Spirit~ Love the words confetti sky
Bravo- You are so good at Haikus
Excellent images-message
Precious!!
Congratulations on Your HM!
-Throws confetti-
Woooooooooo Hoooooooooooo
Thank You for sharing Your Talent and Voice~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet One
Best wishes in the contest too
with much love & light~ Desire~*~
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Beautiful poem sis, it does look like a confetti party.
Best wishes in the contest
Big Bro
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oh this does
take ones breath away, lovely picture there, thank you for this entry, good luck in my contest...MM
looks like my out doors lol
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the image and imagery are both beautiful. I am reading this over and over again ... because I feel there is something lacking in the set up. Somehow I don't grasp winter right away as the word confetti could be leaves of autumn or something. Perhaps if instead of the word a, you used something like "cold or chill or something to show us the confetti is cold ... just a thought. It is beautiful and thank you for entering
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thanks you all
I did re do it to fit the 5/7/5 format
Hugs
Susan~ -
Sorry to take so long but work is killing me as of late. I love the way you've done this one and congrats on the HM.
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Awww...this is cute! I like thinking of snow as confetti! We have about 3" on the ground with more on the way. It might even snow Christmas Eve. Wheee!
Good Luck in the contest!
Love Ya, Sis!
<3 Maureen
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Hi Susan!
Beautiful piece, and it mirrors the pic very well! I've also put something in this contest as I'm feeling very seasonally inspired at the mo'!
Thought I should warn you though, the rules state entries should be in the traditional Haiku measure of 5/7/5 (it's on the contest page), but in yours, the count is 4/6/5. I know when I entered MariGoes' recent contest, she allowed "Short Haiku" (shorter metre/syllabic measure etc), but I'm not sure whether Piccola would, as she has only mentioned 5/7/5 Haiku. Maybe have a word with her just to be on the safe side
Hope you're all ready for a fantastic Xmas and New Year mate
Stu
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This is so beautiful Susan and your words make it even more so. Cingrats on the HM and good luck in this contest too.
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Loving the comparison, the party,
the confetti, the sky!
Just perfect!
M-C
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Wonderful
What a great haiku for the theme. Congratulations on the honorable mention.
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Gorgeous imagery, Susan. Now I know for sure that I won't be entering this contest.
Sorry you have been ill. Hope you are feeling better now.
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A beauty, good sis. Breathtaking!
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Well done
I love the picture.The words are stunning I do not know how you do it.
Great Job
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I love the concept in this haiku, although it does not exactly fit the specific rules of one, it is still very well done indeed! The imagery is excellent and I adore that first line:" confetti sky" so beautiful!! Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors. Hetohke'e *
YOU HAVE JUST BEEN HOODWINKED; Courtesy of the Poetic Bandits
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What a wonderful Haiku!!! Wow you have captured so much in so little. Excellent flow. I so enjoyed reading this
You have just been Hood-Winked
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I remember this Haiku!! I've read this before in a competition we'd both entered and the phrase "confetti sky" left a lasting impact! A pleasure to stop by for a Bandit style Hood-winking and revisit this lovely piece!
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Excellent
Susan, this write is breathtaking.
WOW!
Beautifully penned.
Well done.
Keep up with the great work.
Keep on penning.
*S* Cynthia -
Shivering delight!
Susan, You always see the sparkling magic of nature and whip it into eye candy for your poems. I adore this pretty page and heartsong... Love you, too!
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Perfect!
Confetti is a suberb metaphor for the falling snow! This is a creative and stunning Haiku you've written! Wonderful!
~Lori
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WOW!!! First of all I love the picture. And you captured my feelings about snow perfectly. Girl this is brilliant. A surprise party! What a perfect description. This is a sure fire winner in my book. Good luck in the contest.
Jeannie
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So Beautiful
Hi Susan, This was a beautiful winter haiku. Your imagery is breathtaking. Such beauty in so few words. Not an easy task and you did it soooooooooo well!!! Thank you for this pleasant read. Take care, Sandy
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Lovely..
Fluffy flakes brought down from high
Chase away the blues and whys
Brightening all that lies below
Covered now with precious snow
Hugs and Happy Holidays
-Eddy
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This haiku was direct and to the point..Confetti, now that is a unique representation of the snow and so true..We had our first seasons squalls just minutes ago and I will remember these words while looking around the winter wonderland this season..
Thanks for sharing
Lori -
Very elegant and joyful!
I love the way you succeeded in conveying both deep respect for nature, and a bold, almost childlike enjoyment that made this 'party' yours!
Beautiful!
Cheers!
Ferenc
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awww..so cute!! i love it..just one of those haikus that are just so ..perfect. wonderful discription..confetti..interesting metaphor..and the last line is so cliche but the best line of all..lol. wonderful piece
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This is so pristine and sugary in flavor, that is the only way to describe the perfect feeling of a wonderful fluffy snowstorm as you have presented it. Best of luck in the contest, this is a lovely seasonal piece with a happy feel, a great day brightener. Bravo.
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"Confetti sky" .....I love that. It is a very fitting description. Lovely haiku!
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I love it!
Sort sweet & explains so much
in so little time.
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Loved it!
Love the way you described the snow and its effect on you, Sis! Good Luck in the Contest!
Love Ya !
♥ Maureen
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Simplistically beautiful
Adds a bit of joy to snowfall. Makes one appreciate the beauty of falling snow with very few words. Nicely done. -
Beautiful
This is absolutely lovely. you have done a wonderful job with this.. Lovely.
*Go with God*my friend and may his peace and healing be with you always.
Valerie
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Very pretty image of a haiku, and I never thought of snow falling as "confetti" before, but it really is such a comparable image, and very fitting too! Not much of a "snow" and "winter" person myself, but to envision this haiku, it's almost a sense of excitement for this winter's first snowfall!
Thank you for this great entry to the contest!
Jo
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Ooh! Haiku becomes you! This is yuletide elegance, my Ky sister. All the best to you in the contest. Luv, ♥ Belle
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Beautiful
Aww, Susan, this is such a lovely haiku. So expressive of that moment when we first step into winters' wonderland
And as always you've chosen the perfect picture to compliment your work.
Good luck in the contest
love and
Dee
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Lovely and refreshing
Lovely Susan you wrote a beauty the picture and the reflection is perfect.. You did a wonderful piece.
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Gorgeous!
The snow is truly beautiful. Too bad it is so cold. As much as I enjoy the insulated hush after a blizzard, and the beauty of falling snow, I would not want to move back to New York where I would have to shovel it again.
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Winter enchantment!
This is my most favorite haiku that I ever did see and read! What a perfect wintertime thought!
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Wah ! Haiku
I love haiku very much and this haiku was exceptional
I see my mother nature through your words
Good work - keep writing
Wish you all the best
With Love,
Vibiesh Chungath Venugopal -
Something about snow is so magical,
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Very beautiful...
Darling
Are haikus more than
beats five, seven, five
upon three lines and
awesome like yours alive.
Smoosh
Janet
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Thanks so much for your wonderful comment sis...
Appreciate it so much
Hugs
Susan~~~
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very beautiful
I love your use of the word confetti, to show the reader how the snow is falling. Taken by surprise, like most of the snowfalls, and it sure can take your breath away, literally.
The picture you chose is really beautiful!
Good luck in the contest Susan.
Ethereal Melody
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