When I first saw him, I could see,
Forever in his eyes.
Smoldering looks, that promised,
Love…
It caught me by surprise.
His body brought me passion.
Only for him, did my heart beat.
My soul was linked with his.
In a word I felt…
Complete!
Through the months, I’d look and see,
Forever in his eyes.
Smoldering looks, that promised,
Love…
A lifetime of blissful sighs.
My world was filled with music,
It spilled across the land.
I believed in magic.
Heaven…
Was my lovers hand.
When I first saw him, I could see,
Forever in his eyes.
Smoldering looks, that promised,
Love…
It caught me by surprise.
Yesterday, I saw that look,
Aimed at someone new.
I tried to deny it.
I know…
It can’t be true.
Every time I look, I see,
Forever in his eyes.
Smoldering looks, that promise,
Love…
But now I realize.
The greatest love I’ve known,
Will only make me weep.
His eyes are making,
Promises…
His heart, will never keep.
Patricia Gibson-Little
Author notes
Written February 16th, 2002
In a list
A contest entry
- Eyes, the doorway to the soul? by BlazingSwords.
250 points, ended May 18, 2003, 30 entries
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his eyes are making promises, his heart will never keep...
my word, that was powerful... beautiful job!
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wow!!! great job... as the other two people who left comments said... i love the repetition and especially how in each stanza four lines down is only a one word phrase... very powerful, infact the whole poem is truly beautiful, it flows, and its very descriptive... looking over your poem again... i am still wowed and still love this poem a lot, it is truly that beautiful... (bookmarking, lolz) great job, good luck, and keep writing!!!
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I trully belive this is an excellent poem. as Blazing said i love the repition. i love how you change the rep at the end.
quite and excellent peice of work! -
The repetition in this poem is great. It makes yet another love poem have a slightly different twist. Course, that could just be because I like repetitions, but oh well.
Thanks for entering your poem!!
-Heather
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