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The Gift (for Cathy)







if
I could
give anything
that I wanted to you
I would give you my eyes
so that you could see for yourself
the wonderful person you have become
and the unfathomable future possible yet
in an undeniable, crystal clear way
forcing you to truly understand
your possibility and you
could then learn to
find it yourself
without
me






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  • myrataal silver member
    December 5, 2006

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    A Gift of Immense Value!

    This is a gift of immense value -- tied to a ribbon, Cathy can wear this sculpture of words as a medaljon, a token of love. You are a precious friend and this gift says much of the both of you.

    Well expressed.

    I was just wondering: why the capitalizations at the beginning of the poem? Is it necessary?

    Love
    Always Myra


    • PerVirtuous Allan gold member
      December 5, 2006
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      A Gift of Immense Value!

      I changed it as you have suggested. This was spontaneous and took about six minutes. I did not proofread as I wanted to get it to her quickly, before she left AP for her party. Thanks for the kind words and the suggestion.
  • nothinghere silver member
    December 4, 2006

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    Beautiful Birthday Wish For Our Angel

    Beautiful, she deserves nothing less from any of us, and I thank you for putting into words what I can't today.... tis a wonderul tribute and I'm sure it meant more than words could say to her too.... she is nothing short of magical....

    Wonderful job

    Karen

    • PerVirtuous Allan gold member
      December 5, 2006
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      Magical? You don't know the half of it!

      Yes, yes. I have had a very magical experience with Cathy. She and I may as well be twins. (she is the nice one, I'm the evil one) She is the epitome of joy.

  • Stormy Sky
    December 4, 2006

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    Great

    I like this piece. Shor sweet and too the point. I also love how you used shapes in your poetry. Nicely affective. Love it.

  • Taranand
    December 4, 2006

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    Wonderful

    I loved this tender feelingful write. Your friend would never want to go it alone if they knew you thought that way about them.


    • PerVirtuous Allan gold member
      December 4, 2006
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      She knows. Her comment is a few above yours. She is going to have to do it alone as she can't seem to fit me in... ha ha ha. Thanks for your comment.

  • Cannonsfire silver member
    December 4, 2006

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    This is an awesome write and crystal clear in its diamond form, it shine out and emits all the love and emotion you have chosen to share. Well done


  • PoetsAngel
    December 4, 2006

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    Thank-you Al, this is the sweetest Birthday gift, I couldn't ask for anything more, I have been given your wisdom and your beautiful words to carry with me through life

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