Deep in thought I'm looking in the eyes
Through the mirrors I'm now entering in
I'm trying to read your deepest thoughts
for what I'm going to understand a vision
Now I'm exploring a very sweet story here
Nothing can be hidden from me anymore
I'm doing nothing but trying to seek the truth
Baby a vision shows me many things that I'll adore
Now I'm closing my eyes and I'll see this
What is important to me that I'm part of it
How it feel special to be wanted and loved
A vision that's impacting...for how deeply it hit
So I've seen what I wanted to and there's much more
I've been given a vision to take that next step
I won't be blind to what I know is fate and destiny
A vison of love is you...its what I want to get...
David
A contest entry
- Through Your Eyes. by Poetryintheblood.
350 points, ended May 22, 2007, 8 entries
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Please tell me what you think
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Thank you for your entry, Josephine
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good
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Nice sentiment, a little confusing at first, but I think I got the gist of it at the end.
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VERY GOOD
SOUNDS LIKE YOU ARE IN LOVE WITH SOMEONE HOPE SHE RETIRNS THE SENTIMENT GOOD LUCK WITH YOUR WRITING
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touching
you bring out so much emotion, and that expresses so much love, something that seems to be missing in relationships today...awesome write and pen on...smile!
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I've missed this style..the use of the word baby makes it so personal..happy to be reading you again.
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So very, very beautifully written, Dave; you have one of the most loving and giving hearts that I know of!
All the best to you! -
Breathtaking!!!!
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Your poetry often takes me to lands unchartered....waters yet sailed and the stars yet to be discovered....what treasured moments your writing gives me....so sweet....smiles...Love, Terry
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pretty
I really like this poem, it's beautiful. I can see that whoever this is pertaining to, you really care about them. The way you wrote this fills the piece with strong emotion, intended or not. the way you use imagery is wonderful too. It's like I'm right there witnessing such a cute vision. You have a wonderful way with words. This is a good write, I hope to continue to see such wonderful work from you.
-Sayge
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A vision of love is her...
words to swoon a woman silly over
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