The Glass Guardians
When evil begins to rise,
their job is to make its demise.
They out-do it everytime.
Good always survives evil's crimes.
(chorus)
Shatter the glass
and let our bodies ignite.
Grow and gallop swiftly on the grass,
gallop and spread your light.
They help the weak,
and give aid to those who seek.
They light up the sky
when it get too dark.
You hear their cry
when evil makes a mark.
Shatter the glass
and let our bodies ignite.
Grow and gallop swiftly on the grass,
gallop and spread your light.
Their bodies of glass,
tiny and small.
But they become a great mass,
when they hear a call.
Legends tell of their might,
as evil flees before them.
Safe again becomes the night,
and people may sleep once again.
Their might is unwavering,
their light is strong and unquavering.
Their time is now and forever.
Call upon them, for late, they will be never.
Shatter the glass
and let our bodies ignite.
Grow and gallop swiftly on the grass,
gallop and spread your light.
They are the Glass Guardians of the world;
they are white majestic unicorns.
Not all their secrets have been told.
They do not die, but more are still born.
Silvery white stallions under the moon,
clouds above them dare not loom.
Their bodies shine and give bright white light.
At their mention, arise, dare not the sprites.
Each mane and tail has a different colour;
one is as dark as the night sky, the other as pink as a flower.
Each has a power of their own.
They are the strongest creatures the world has ever known.
So mighty Glass Guardians,
let, shatter your glass
and your bodies ignite.
Grow and gallop swiftly on the grass,
gallop and spread your light.
(repeat chorus twice)
By: Nada Adel Sobhi
© Copyrighted 2006
Author notes
option 2 MAGIC!
In a list
A contest entry
- fab 5 lyrics!!! by second-born.
500 points, ended June 16, 2007, 10 entries
Honorable mention
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Comments
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beautiful absolutely beautiful. you've got a 4 for this poem as well bringing your total to an 8. thanks for entering the contest and best of luck to you. Kahy
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THis is beautiful.
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I have to agree with those below me. the chorus is my favorite part of the entire piece. It was very creative and makes you pay attention. great job
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This was good.I liked this poem...How creative to write a poem about unicorns...This did inspire me a little...But with a story...Oh well at least it inspired me...Thanks for the magical entry!
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this is awesome, although its like a fairy tale short story lol just kidding its really good great job and good luck in the contest. this was my favorite part btw:
"So mighty Glass Guardians,
let, shatter your glass
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Grow and gallop swiftly on the grass,
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Very nice. Title was a little off, but other than that you did a great job. Next time try not ebreviate lyrics in you're title.
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great now when will this song be release so I can hear it .....
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thank you for sharing such a magical song with us...your piece is full of vivid and moving words...and you make me want to dream this night to really see and touch the unicorns...I also love your chorus...it just makes me wonder who would you want to sing your song...
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I love this write. So many times subjects like Unicorns or fairies turn me off from reading things but I loved it, it was great. It really draws you into it. Nice job.
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Great job.
In the recesses of my mind I could hear some obscure and epic European metal band playing in to the wind at the edge of a forest. lol That means that this piece was so rich with vivid imagery, that the rhythm and flow, itself, was so universal, that it invoked powerful imagery, and you did a great job in bringing that together with diction and subject matter. -
Yay! My favorite subject, unicorns. I really liked the song. I think it is really clever. The one line that was kinda off was this one "Call upon them, for late, they will be never" This sounded really awkward. I know what you are trying to get at but you might want to shorten it or change it to make sense.
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I love the topic and the imagery however you do have some parts where the beat is off. Sometimes it sounds like a herd of Unicorns thundering past and sometimes it's more like a trot. You know though if you could find a way to do it and have it produced the right way that sort of effect could be marvelous. Just think the lyrics paint the picture while the increase of the drums lends a heartbeat to their passing. I can hear it but I'm not sure how it could be accomplished. If you were thinking flute and soft music then I would suggest some tweaking sweetie otherwise it's perfect for a symphonic rush.
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But phoenixes are stronger!!!
lol
I liked this write alot!!!! A gorgeous description of unicorns, truly stunning!!!! I congratulate you on that!!! It is not often that I read such nice songs about mythical beasts... but one can be a unicorn if they so desire.. just like I chose to become a phoenix... I was ment to be one.. I could tell when it finally just kicked in... maybe you belong in the unicorn tribe! Great great write!!!
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I'm sort of torn here... I severly dislike people who click on my promotions and don't leave a comment, as I just as often dislike an adverse critique. But I suppose I most dislike when people comment dishonestly.
So I suppose I have to be honest and confess that I didn't pick up the beat. And from there on I really didn't catch the tone or texture repetitions. But that's just me and there seem to be lots of other people who really liked this lyric. In any event you have nothing to worry about, odds are that the other folks that commented here buy lots more records... er CD's than I do.
Always keep writing!
Rainbows,
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That was rude sir.
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You wrote a beautiful song.. I can hear the peacefulness in its music.. and the joy. Well done poet. Blessings. d
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I Love to inhale Lyrics and this is one Beautiful verse You have penned!
You did this so well and I could hear the song playing in my Mind
Magnificently orchestrated!!
Thank You for sharing Your Talent
Many blessings to You!
Best wishes too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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Thank you so much Desire, glad you enjoyed it. I'll sing it again now
Thank you for the applauds!
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Very good. I enjoyed it. - i liked the ending befor repeating the chorus twice. It was very descriptive, magical, and full with fantasy! Great write.
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I really like this song a lot. You showed a great imagination for this write, and I could hear this being sang on a movie set for children to young adults. You had some nice images in this write as well as a good story-line. Nice job.
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Thank you so much Superstition. I am really glad you enjoyed it. Thank you for the applaud.
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Sounds like a very cheesy power metal song. But it must've taken a lot of work and it isn't bad,of course. I liked it, so keep up the good work.
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Thank you soo much Nick. I am glad you enjoyed reading my song. Thank you for commenting.
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Excellent
I liked the chorus of this poem and the concept of the unicorns as guardians. I liked the way you used glass as an image to symbolise the unicorns. Glass is usually something we see as delicatee and fragile, in this poem the breaking glass represents a release of power and represents good fighting evil. I liked the vivid use of language and flow of this poem.
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Thank you so much Room! I am really glad you enjoyed my new Unicorn-idea and my song. Thank you for the applauds.
Nooni
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awesome
Great job nooni
this was a great piece in my opinion
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Wow that was great. It is quite a different writing style for you but still says you because of the unicorn. It is a beautiful song and has a nice rythym. Good luck in the competition. Oh and the repitition of chorus is nice, it's like everytime you say the same thing except it takes on a different role when you use it again(sorry if that was confuseing lol sometimes what makes sense in my mind doesn't make much sense when written). Well n e ways, once again good luck in the competition ^_^!
Jess
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Thankx Jess YAY!
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Beautiful, sis
Dear sister of mine
It’s great to read such beautiful poem from your hand. I read it first in the mail you sent me. I know you have a great interest in fantasy poetry and I think you are always good at them. I also understand unicorns are you’re the most favorites.
If you are The Night Hope
let, shatter your glass
and your bodies ignite.
Grow and gallop swiftly on the grass,
gallop and spread your light.
It was really a sweet poem, sis.. especially the rhyme part and the lyric aspect. I did enjoy it very much.
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest (To me it’s the winner)
~Massy~
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Thank you so so much my sweet Massy. I am really glad you enjoyed reading it. I keep repeatng the chorus every now and then while studying or while doing stuff around the house. Thank you for the applauds.
Nooni
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wow
Wow. what an amazing piece of writing. I love the desciptiveness, the vivid imagery. I love the lines 37-43 the best, those were my favorites, though the whole piece was awesome. Your talent never ceases to amaze me. The idea that this is a song, just adds to it, as one finds a rythem in their head as they read. good job as always with this one. -
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Thank you so so much for your wonderful comment. I am really glad you enjoyed reading my song YAY!
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Very interesting!
I like the imagery this conjuers up and would love to hear it in its musical form. It's dark yet inspirational, which is always an interesting mesh. Nice work! -
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Thank you for reading and commenting. I am glad you enjoyed it.
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Wonderful, you have written this so well. You have such a way with words. I love it. Keep up the fabulous work.
Tabitha:
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Thank you so much Tabitha. I am really glad you enjoyed reading my poem/song.
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amazinnnnnnnng
woooooooooowa this is so good girl i guarentee that u'll have ur trophie ( uh if u didnt well dnt blame me) loved the content bas good never beats evil 
gebtiha menen dih just kidding, amazing imagery and damnit girl u r good
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Thankx, I am glad you enjoyed it. Thankx for applauding it.
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Very sweet piece indeed. Unicorns are truly beautiful and magical creatures indeed. Best of luck in the contest. Keep that pen flowing.
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...Amazing
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You've followed the fantasy option well in this progressive piece on Unicorns.~~Suseann
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very nicely done, thank you for entering my contest and such. I wish you the best of luck
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Mystical
I loved your poem. It was amazing! I also loved how you didn't really use the word "unicorn" until the middle of the poem. I think it's true that unicorns protect our (dying) world from evil. This will make a great song soon.
Keep Writing
Your AP Niece
~~Meri~~
P.S. Where did you get the name "The Glass Guardians"???
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Hey Meri. I am glad you enjoyed my poem/song. Thank you for reading, commenting and applauding. The title just came to my head. I always wanted to write something about Glass unicorns but I could never find a title or the right words.
Thankx again, Nooni
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Wow the imagery is wonderful! What kind of music would you put this to(Just wondering)? This is an excellent write, good luck in the contest!-Bethany
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Hey Bethany thank you for reading, commenting and applauding my song. The music is kinda in my head lol..
Thankx again!
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Very good
Shweet!
What musical style do you envision for this song?
It was a very nice fantasty piece. I liked this one much better than your last poem.
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