And does she know those lips that kiss her,
Once kissed me aswell?
Does she know the ring you gave her,
Was bought to fit on my finger?
And does she know that song you sing her,
Was written by me for our first anniversary?
Does she know that you only kiss the end of her nose,
Because you knew that I liked it,
And somehow couldn't shake the habit?
Does she?
I thought not.
Author notes
This was written after a recent trip to visit the woman who was going to be my mother in law. Unfortunately, the guy that I was going to marry, Matt, was there with his new 'fiance'. Only three months after we broke up. Not only has he got over our break up extremely quickly, he has economised used the engagement ring we chose together to propose to hear. (Last seen by myself bouncing off his head when I threw it at him (his head has scarred nicely))
This obviously bought up a few sore subjects, and this is the poem I wrote that night when I got home.
All of this is based on fact. (Even the thing about the nose.)
Kat xXX
Please tell me what you think - and be honest!!!
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oh wow thisis so powerful. you have fit so much emotion into this it is truely beautiful, very well done. this is a lovely piece xo
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Hi Kat
Well, it seems as though you are the lucky one, getting out of what appears to have shown itself to be a shallow and insincere scenario, so consider your fortunes
You certainly articulated your feelings on this one lol. It just all boils down to "an experience from which learning - of one kind or another - can be acquired. Do not allow it to put you off future or prospective encounters and relationships though, as each has its highs and lows, and a story to tell etc.
Just noticed one thing:
"Once kissed me aswell?" Needs a space between "as" and "well".
Thanks for the message a while back; I am online for a few days so hope to catch you at some point.
Best wishes
Stuart
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*tears* that completely sucks... what happened to you i mean. the poem itself was amazing. i could feel the emotion in everyword.
how can people be so... terrible? glad you scarred him.. let it serve as a reminder of what he did.
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awww hunni!!!
i feel your pain, what a jerk, i cant belive he did that! ooo if i ever see him he better tred carefully, other wise his will be sorry.
such a strong truth hun, arrr i want to beat him now.
it really is a beautiful poem filled to the brim with pain.
its so amazing.
love you xxxx
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I like...its kool...and I know exactly how it feels...except it happened with a chick
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The emotions are strong and perfectly placed
The end comes as a perfect punch that jams in so much feeling and emotion
That Matt guy sounds like a right arse, I'm glad you left a nice scar, and I hope it never fades. So when this new fiance asks him how he got it he can think about you and how much he hurt you
Arse
All angry now!
But I saw no fault about this poem, just amazing
I like my nose being kissed It makes me happy!
Brilliant
I can't say anything else!
Love you forever
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i really love this poem kathryn i too just got out of a so called 'engagement' he is now only after a week with some else i understand how u feel i love how you have out your feelings love from kathryn xx
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Emotional
This is amazing, written with truth and honesty and a sence of beauty, it pulls the reader in and is really amazingly written, the ending is amazing, and it's so personal that the words speak louder than any voice could, Well done, and keep it up, this is great.
xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
Love from Hannah
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I thought I'd hate this but I don't. The little details really fleshes it out by making it deeply personal when before it was running along quite a universal thing.
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