Remember us; forget- me- not,
my lips now, liked severed petals.
Blossoms grew with every smile
then, our kisses became the nettles.
Remember us; as glory stems
and nostalgia frames our past.
One sigh, in time, and bittersweet
as memories between are vast.
Remember us; forget- me –not,
and now blossoms another rose.
Yet, as my wounds linger to heal,
your half of our flower grows.
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A sad love poem, what can I say I was in a soppy mood.
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I love the lines: Blossoms grew with every smile then, our kisses became the nettles. Beautiful moving poem - love it
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This is so amazing and stunning.
This is absolutely beautiful, Very well thought out and polished to high perfection. Brilliant piece my friend! loved the form and flow and the rhythm and rhyme are dead on. Captivating piece from start to finish. Don't put down that pen! I love this so much. Keep up the killer work, take care and good luck.
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WOW this is a sad poem but such a wonderful write!!!!
I love this line
Remember us; forget- me –not,
It really provokes the readers thoughts... Your chosen words flow so smoothly....
you have really written a masterpiece
thank you for sharing, this enjoyable read
keep writing you express emotion well
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Very good, I love the way you've used lots of flower and plant imagry along with the forget-me-nots. It's a moving piece, too. It flows very well, apart from maybe the very last line. But a great job.
Oh, and blossoms doesn't have an apostraphe in it.
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thoughtful
This was a very thoughtful write, it is definately worth the readers time. You had a very good flow in this.
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Moving
This is beautiful...and very moving...I am definately feeling what you described perfectly here...I couldn't have put it to words or said it better myself!
~Rachael~
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this is my fave poem yet xxx
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