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shards

mirror

looking
hating
breaking
watching
sparkling
falling
crashing
sounding
scattering
sparkling
looking
hating
getting
brooming
hating
collecting
hating
sweeping
throwing
hating
regretting

shards

Author notes

first off, I'll say there are a lot of good things in the world... namely... those underwater specials on discovery channel and animal planet where they follow ocean creatures until they get killed by their natural predator... which they follow until it gets killed by it's natural predator, etc, etc, .... that being said this is about hating everything that you see when you don't see anything you like.

"You looked, but you didn't see." - Hannibal Lecter

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  • lysdarling
    December 27, 2006

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    suprising revelation, i've never thought of it like that but it makes sense..this is a great piece, congrats
    -lys


  • Rosemary Stroebel silver member
    December 2, 2006

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    OK

    On one level this is a very deep poem. Expressing your raw anger and emotions towards the things you cannot change or come to like.

    On another level it is simply written, thus not making it difficult to follow. Even without your author's note, it is not hard to see where you are going - this is good.

    I note you are trying to repair some of the damage but still cannot make a difference.

    Really deep write.

    Rosemary