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The Night Peter Died

A great man died on nine eleven  
before its most famous date
Now he sits up there in heaven
fused with love and free from hate

He spoke out and said some things
that scared the men in power
Money, guns and greed brings
wrath down from the tower

People cried
so many people cried
and it came to my mind
the night Peter died

That I had to do it
I had to help out
I'd let the words in
and get the word out

See we should be in
shouldn't be out
have to take'm all in
and send'm back out
send'm back out
send'm back out

It's never too late
to try to do great
so try not to wait
just go meet your fate

Yes he died in eighty seven
this man who sang to legalize it
Now he's watchin there from heaven
still seein they can't stop sh*t

He spoke out and said some things
that scared the men in power
Money, guns and greed brings
wrath down from the tower

People cried
so many people cried
And it came to my mind
the night Peter died

That I had to do it
I had to help out
I'd get the words in
and let the word out

See we'll let'm all in
we won't shut'm out
have to take'm all in
and send'm back out
send'm back out
send'm back out

It's never too late
to try to be great
Now try not to wait
just go see your fate!







www.answers.com/topic/september-11


added 2/9/06

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Written May 14th, 2003

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  • Yvette Champ gold member
    September 27, 2006
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    Hi,I understand now,I did read the lyrics via the link you sent me and they certainly have a good hook line,a clear message and speak the truth,doctors,nurses,lawyers everyone uses the herb to give them the verve!Good luck with your positive stance towards sociatal acceptance ie legalization even though that will lead to taxation it will surely reduce vexation across each and every nation


  • UncleSpace
    September 27, 2006
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    Yes!

    Thank you very much, you are ver right, cool contest, good luck!

    Unc

  • UncleSpace
    September 27, 2006
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    Yup!

    I found that that link was bad, so here's my old comment with the new link: Thank you very much, I first got the idea for this song the night he died, finally really started it soon before posting it here. Don't worry about offending though, besides, you probably have the right idea. See for yourself here: www.stlyrics.com/songs/p/petertosh7044/legalizeit261792.html
    Edited on Sep 27 because 'spelling & grammar'.


  • Bubble-Licious
    September 26, 2006
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    amazing

    This is interesting. I find that sometimes one can discover more about a situation by writing about it. Good write. I like the flow, and your repetition is wisely placed.

    Buena suerte, mi amigo! I'll comment more when the contest has ended.

    Much love, as always,
    Bubbles

  • UncleSpace
    February 9, 2006
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    Yup!

    Thank you so much, and you were right to think about the most famous 9/11.
    "A great man died on nine eleven
    before its most famous date"

    My suggestion on that earlier reply was before I added this link: www.answers.com/topic/september-11

    Unc
    Edited on Aug 09 because 'spelliing & grammar'.

  • kat14903
    February 8, 2006
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    song style

    very good. at first i thought the reference of 9 11 was reguarding the day we lost so many in the towers and planes that awful day in 2001. i like the rhythm and style you use here. i'm gonna look up your suggestion above to google search this reference

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    February 8, 2006
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    I take your point, he died trying to change things, you haven`t forgotton him and speak for him as we should all do reat things , I wish I knew what it was he was trying to legalize , the only thing that springs to mind may we way off beam and I wouldn`t like to cause offence if wrong.It is good to honour our loved ones and this poetic tribute must be a fine accolade to him


  • GirlUnderGlass
    February 19, 2004
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    This is a great poem. Very Bob like indeed. I could groove to this! I really enjoy your writing and am going to add you to my favorites.

  • UncleSpace
    May 15, 2003
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    TakeFlight, thank you so much, I'm glad you like it. About the point though, to paraphrase Chrissy Hynde, I'd rather not tell you what I meant, because it might influence your own interpretation. However, I will say that you will probably realize my main point when you figure out (1) who "Peter" is (at your age I'd be surprised if you knew who he was from the reading), and (2)what the result of his death was. Try google.com "Peter died 9/11 1987" ... Thanx again!
    Edited on May 16, 10:45 because 'adding'.

  • takeflight
    May 15, 2003
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    GREAT rhythm to this - i'm not 100% sure of the point, but it's well written anyway...and i really like the line "fused with love and free from hate" good read, very good write!


  • Bigmammajen
    May 14, 2003
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    really interesting
    I wish I were somewhat witty at the moment to say something actually important, but ive been writing an essay for the past 3 hours and have about 3 brain cells left :S I just dont like to read and not leave a comment, so sorry for the generic one

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