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This Dress Still Looks the Same

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This Dress Still Looks the Same

 

Pout...

I look like a frilly walnut

with bits poking out

A living doll on a shelf, all but...

Rather be a fairy with orange wings

not crimpy curls and coloured strings

 

 

Displeasure...

Be a good girl, always told

stand still, look pretty, be a treasure

packaging me up like a piece of gold

Rather be playing on the swings

not crimpy curls and coloured strings

 

 

Melancholy...

Feet don't work in black shiny shoes

height of fashion when your name is Polly

I'm not going to wear them, I simply refuse

Rather be swimming with water wings

not crimpy curls and coloured strings

 

 

Delights...

I like spiders, teddies and puppy dogs

ice-cream, dollies and big flying kites

better than dresses are green slimy frogs

Rather be doing other things

not crimpy curls and coloured strings

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Picture credit...John Newby 

 

"WORDFLAIR" Poetry Form, My own creation
 
Wordflair Instructions:   
Stanzas...minimum of two, maximum of five – [crown]
Left or centre aligned
Six lines to each stanza
 
Line #1...ONE SINGLE WORD...to convey mood and theme
Lines #1, 2, 3, 4, rhyming scheme: abab
Lines #5 and 6 is a rhyming couplet: cc
Line #6 is a refrain throughout each stanza

 

My inspiration for creating Wordflair is because I like to put emotion into my poetry, and I love the challenge of following a set pattern of formed poetry.    So I set about creating Wordflair.  I like the way this form provides the mood and theme of each stanza, and because it has a refrain, there is continuity, linking them together.   I also wanted to incorporate a rhyme scheme with an abab on four lines, and the last two lines of each stanza being a rhyming couplet...I think it reads with a good flow because of the rhyme, and the structure is nice to see.   I purposely didn’t restrict Wordflair with a syllable count, leaving the writer freedom of line lengths, within reason...

 

 

 

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  • Viva La Vie Boheme
    March 26, 2007

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    HOODWINKED!!! (courtesy of... The Poetic Bandits!)

    The rhyme was perfect and the flow effortless, and wow, don't you just deserve that sparkling gold trophy? Brilliant, yet again!


  • Desire gold member
    March 26, 2007

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    Beautiful-

    Congratulations on Your trophy win and what a Beautiful piece You have penned again~
    but then all Your pieces are Beautiful in their Magnificent poetic way~ no matter what genre~
    You paint the canvas for the reader to Journey alongside You~
    Thank You for sharing Your Talent again~

    Oooooooooooooooooooooh You have also been Hoodwinked by The Poetic Bandits


    Many blessings to You
    Best wishes too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • JohnnyD gold member
    March 26, 2007

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    Now, I like this style! Plays into my type of emotions. I cannot pick a favorite stanza here as they are all great. But the last stanza reminds me of DK;
    Delights...

    Like spiders, teddies and puppy dogs

    ice-cream, dollies and big flying kites

    better than dresses are green slimy frogs

    Rather be doing other things

    not crimpy curls and coloured strings

    Don't ya think?



    DK & JD

    YOU HAVE BEEN HOODWINK!! by the Poetic Bandits!


  • The Poetic Bandits gold member
    March 25, 2007

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    3 claps...9pts

    Reward from The Poetic Bandits reading list

    ~Lilac

  • Susan E. Pennycuff
    March 24, 2007

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    wow... you put the entire form under copyright...well, I guess I won't be trying this form out anytime soon...lol, I was thinking the whole time I was reading this piece, I really need to give this form a shot, but then I read the authors notes, someone always has to burst my bubbles...lol.

    This piece is beautiful, you always put out such wonderful things. God Bless.


    • -LilacThOughts- gold member
      March 24, 2007
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      speakingup4kids...

      Thank you Suzi for your kind review of this poem, and of course you may write in this form when ever you like, in fact I would be very honoured if you were to do so

      It is copyrighted to prevent someone claiming they have created it thats all...please feel free to use it like any other form of poetry

      ~Lilac


  • grannyeri gold member
    March 23, 2007

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    What a lovely presentation - the background, picture and poem fit together so well. Can see why this took the gold in the contest - flows so well and such heartfelt emotions. Congratulations.


  • Lady Altheia gold member
    March 22, 2007

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    This is very cute. The pictutre matches it perfectly. Congrats on the gold trophy. Your form was perfect. I thought it was incredibly cute.


  • Frogzter gold member
    March 22, 2007

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    I've seen a few other of your Wordfair pieces and I think a few others here have already picked up on it. I think it is so cool that you created this... It really is exceptional. but this by far is the best one I'ved read yet and it the pleasure was all mine!
    Keep the ink flowing!
    Blessings,
    Frogz~


  • Poet of Dreams
    March 22, 2007

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    this is a really cool form, not one i can see myself diving into, but i can deffinently see this taking off. as for the poem itself, I've never worn a dress, so i can't really relate to it, but it was well written and very cool

    Good Write and God Bless
    The Unrequited Writer
    Ben b.


  • -Ink Artist-
    March 22, 2007

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    You are a treasure! Your style is like no other I've come across and I truly admire you. How many times have I told you I adore this form you've created? It never fails to impress me the way you take a simplistic thought and create a brilliantly designed piece of poetry from it. You are a serious talent, my dear! I love the artwork that inspired this write. It matches your lovely words perfectly. Another magnificent showing of your poetic gift. Thank you so much for sharing!


    ~Lori


  • blondone
    March 22, 2007

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    I always so enjoy the poems you write in this word flair it's so beautiful, love the words written such true feelings we have, a grand image, lovely flow, a very delightful read...


  • Sharcu silver member
    March 21, 2007

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    If you didn't win gold for this, there must have been something wrong with the judge This is awesome! Your form is creative and you write in it so well. Creative topic and way you wrote it. Loved reading each line as it flowed so well from one to the next. Thanks for sharing
    --Tim


  • Twinstar
    March 21, 2007

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    Extraordinary!

    Oh Lilac! I just love this! This is so sweet! You have put so many different emotions in this piece. I love the form and flow of this poem. You have captured a lot of feelings from the picture and placed them on this page that brings it to life, right before the eyse of the reader. Extraordinary!
    Love & Light
    DebberaSmile


  • ronnica
    March 21, 2007

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    Delightful a little bit of every little girl in there
    I liked the flow and the rhyming was so picture perfect, it is all sowell done

  • Frodofan
    March 21, 2007

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    This not only describes me when I was littler, but now too.

    I can just remember being forced to wear this one dress that I HATED. And I absolutely loved frogs and everything that other little girls didn't.

    Nicely done and congrats on your gold!


  • Ontarah
    March 21, 2007

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    The repetition of the line at the end of each stanza is very effective and the flow in this is liquid smooth. Your description is also great. I really like:
    "I look like a frilly walnut
    with bits poking out"
    And I very much agree that frogs are way better than dresses and curls.


  • Rita Krocha
    March 21, 2007

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    Awww....so sweet and cute
    I like all of the lines.....the one word in each stanza that opens them and how masterfully you have penned it.

    A Great Pleasure reading it!


  • ForgottenMemories
    March 21, 2007

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    this is great!! excellent poem, I really enjoyed it! it is not surprising you got a gold trophy for this poem, you are very talented. well written xShadx


  • Spiritual Nature
    March 21, 2007
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    Excellent poem. I really enjoy the format as well as the context. Great job.


  • My Solitude
    March 21, 2007

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    This is a masterpiece!!! Wonderful flow, amazing picturisation. Three cheers to the golden trophy it brought u. U 're massively talented. Stay blessed
    LOve, Bob.


  • oldmanriver1942
    March 21, 2007

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    wow is all I can say!!! what a clasic write..three Applauds for this one...Wait! I think i will read this again

  • Betweenmoods
    December 7, 2006
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    Excellent

    Hi Queenie, very clever writing, great interpretation of the picture, vivid thoughts of a sweet child, very real Amazing work hon and so deserving Gold. Hope you are well and happy in our wonderful Kingdom...Take care my sweet, Love Nip xx


  • broad-and-fair
    December 3, 2006
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    an interesting form, can you lay out the rules for the layout, it seems to be apparent but might be useful.
    The story goes very well with the picture that inspired them very inventive of you, well done


  • pixxiepoetess
    December 2, 2006

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    What a fun poem. Tomboys never take well to being stuffed into frills. I love this form, I think I've told you that before, but it still holds true. It is especially wonderful for light-hearted pieces like this one. I can see why you took the gold --->pixxie<---


  • Lauren Noir
    December 2, 2006

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    Very worthy of a gold trophy! You beautifully took thoughs and feelings from the picture and put it into a skillful form, beautiful context and with amazing thoughs and feelings

    The repatition worked so well, and it worked in with the backgound. it worked so well with the sub titles, you worked into the little girls mind and gave her a personality we can all relate to when we were that age

    Ahhh, a brillaint job
    And worthy of a trophy

    Well done my special mum
    Love as always and forever more


  • x Gemini x
    December 2, 2006

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    Adorable

    Defianlty a good peice. Its got wonderful imagery, and it puts people into perspective. I like how you start each stanza off with a special line.


  • ShelleyA gold member
    December 2, 2006

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    A Delight!

    Hi Lilac. A beautifully imaginative write. Love your form. Lovely imagery, flow, rhyme and tone. Deep expression of emotion. Vivid descriptives. Wonderful word choice. Strong alliteration. You've captured the precocious thoughts of this little girl who doesn't seem quite happy in her outfit. Well crafted and a most enjoyable read. Congratulations on winning gold. Shelley


    • -LilacThOughts- gold member
      December 2, 2006
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      Thank you...

      Thank you Shelley for your visit and review, I very much appreciate it

      ~Lilac

      • ShelleyA gold member
        December 2, 2006
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        You're very welcome Lilac. It's my pleasure. Take care. Shelley


  • Sonja
    December 2, 2006

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    Realy nice and different. Vivid and descriptive. Great poetic form, not only because of rhyme. Nice and soft backgound fits perfect with your poem. Yes, this is how girls brain is working. Congratlations!
    ~Sonja~


  • ma belle
    December 2, 2006

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    Oh wow, I see this piece won straightaway and remarkably so!! Congratulations my Lilac Princess. Luv you, &hearats; Auntie Belle

  • onehappy1
    December 2, 2006

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    Sweet

    This is just too cute. Every line seems to carry you right there with her in her poutiness. Flow and words came together perfectly. Congratultions on your win.

    Carolyn ~j~


  • Lavender Butterfly silver member
    December 2, 2006

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    So clever.

    This is truly a lyrical write. Very creative and so imaginative. Thanks for this entry... x Butterfly.

  • Wanted By You
    December 1, 2006

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    Delightful

    I knew when I read the first two lines I would like this poem, and I did. Not many poets can do that to their readers, it's an art in my eyes. A new favorite. I hope all your others live up to the magic of this poem. It was so free and flowing, elegant and sopisticated, yet still playful and humorous.
    Brilliant!
    Stephanie


    • -LilacThOughts- gold member
      December 1, 2006
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      Thank you...

      Thank you very much for your delightful review, I'm so glad you liked it

      ~Lilac

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