Flickers dance across
seering flesh,
magnetic, pulsing.
Each caress,
electrified.
Your conducive temple,
steamed
as velvet tongue traces
hot crevices...
striking molten moisture
upon sinned skin.
A thunderous rumble
escapes sweet lips.
Tantalizing tenderness
between my palms,
oiled of sweat.
A sweet deluge,
showering you in kisses...
lips caressing,
inch by demanding inch.
Slow, sensual,
a journey to the forest of rain
where the rivers of Eden flow.
Impale me with your lust,
your desire
as the earth's quake
becomes one with our bodies.
The tempest's wind,
each breathless gasp;
breast to chest
panting in unified rhythm.
Inhaled essence of lust,
vertiginous of ecstasy.
Perfected thrust,
hip to grinding hip,
mesmerized;
fluid movements as one.
Climbing climactic crests
to surge in orgasmic bliss
amidst the horizon of
the perfect storm.
Author notes
A little on the adult side, but hey, storms are just right up my alley and I tend to think they are erotic!
In a list
A contest entry
- Your Best Prewrite Quickie by Heavenly Angel.
450 points, ended January 16, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Thunder & Lightning by RedAquarius.
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"seering" = searing, I like the word "vertiginous" but not sure it fits there as it means dizzy - maybe if you change "of" to with?
"sinned skin" - excellent use of alliteration and imagery together. In fact you use alliteration very well throughout. I like the sensual tone, and honestly am surprised you are the only one so far. -
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Thanks for the comments, appreciate it.
As for vertiginous, the definition I read stated a whirling sensation, and it was how I saw it in there. But I can see where with would make more sense. I'll have to make a few adjustments.
I too am kind of surprised there weren't more sensual entries. Thanks for hosting, enjoyed!
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Oooh wow! Is this ever steamy!!!
VERY much enjoyed this write
Very sultry and seductive and just a fine sharing!
All the best to you in this contest! -
Static jumps form the fingers
Whew, that sure fired the electricity through one. Sparks leapt off the fingertips as you wrote this I bet. Well done and a very sensual piece. A storm of nature couldn't generate as much voltage
Be well and be blessed.
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Thanks hun, appreciate the comments. You can say there were a few sparks flying around, lol.
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Very earth shattering!
Oh wow! Now that's a storm! Oh so perfect storm!
I just love that line:
"Impale me with your lust"
Oooooh! I like the sound of that. Just gives me goose pimples all over!
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Thank you, thank you...Appreciate the comments. Glad you like.
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Damn, turn on the air conditioner!! Whew! I am panting! That certainly is the perfect storm. Thanks for sharing your magnificent talent with us....getting ice!!
Jeannie
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Thank you Jeannie, glad you, ummm, enjoyed. Got to get back into writing more of these, ya know?
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Hot
This was very hot sis...you did great. I really enjoyed reading this...you have a special gift
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Thank you so much Kari, always enjoy your comments.
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ive always enjoy your writings, wish i had half your talent, as always thanks for sharing, nothing here to critic.
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Thanks sweetie, appreciate the comment and the compliment.
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Yes the title suits- Very breath taking
Wow can I breath yet? Jeez you are one talented writer. I wish I had that ability to write erotically.
I'm just not that smooth with that style of writeing. And when I do it's an accident.
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Yes, please breathe now,lol.
Thank you for the comments, much appreciated. Glad you liked this.
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