The
page starts
screaming words
that want to be free
Breaking away from what
seems true to start believing
What lies in the truth is behind
what's deceiving, open your eyes for
the proof and you'll start to see things
Blinded by a group of people who are greedy
They'll take time away from you, your life and
your meaning Because they're the ones who choose
whats right or demeaning. The power they abuse is
fighting for your breathing. Now that's a game
you'll lose because they'll take it while you're
sleeping in a sense you'll stay consumed intense
as if you're dreaming then tension will release you
Y
O
U
will
feel
freedom
ringing
Author notes
I decided to be corny and try to make it look like a bell... well...
there you have it.
A contest entry
- Power II by Melissa Gayle.
500 points, ended December 9, 2006, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give Me Your Personal Best #10 (Prewrites Allowed) by aGent Lemon.
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Cool
Yeah, this rang my bell (a little)
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Ding Ding Ding !!!
I know it's very much a task to make a picture out of words especially out of this type of font.
Wondering if this was in regards to a written text in connection to the "Liberty Bell"? I did a little research and didn't find any so I will presume that this isn't referring "specifically" to something that's been already been said.
"The page starts screaming words that want to be free"
*** Information that were written with a strong desire to be read and spread about without demanding a cost.
"Breaking away from what seems true to start believing
What lies in the truth is behind what's deceiving, open your eyes for the proof and you'll start to see things"
*** That our "goverment" or "beliefs" or "public media" has been conspiring against us
"They'll take time away from you, your life and your meaning
Because they're the ones who choose whats right or demeaning.
The power they abuse is fighting for your breathing."
*** Pehaps that is to keep most of us too pre-occupied to have more power over our societies?
"Now that's a game you'll lose because they'll take it while you're
sleeping in a sense you'll stay consumed intense as if you're dreaming then tension will release you."
*** By game I take it that by following the rules, we will fail to discover what our true strengths are
"YOU will feel freedom ringing"
*** The truth is "alarming" when we find how powerful the mind is.
Well... that's just my quick interpretation anyhow.
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Nicely done in form poetry...but even more so in your words of depth and truth...strong and powerful...well stated...
Best ot you!
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Very nicely done, I like how you have went on a ledge with form...it works well here.
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WOW O_O
Hey that is awsome!! i love the bellshape, that is kewl, great write!!!! honestly
keep it up! creative amazinjason 
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Mhm, this is not the style I would normally find myself enjoying, but today your words have brought an open mind from me and I find that I found great concurment in your piece. That is to say, I enjoyed this, the flow seemed almost as if it were rhymed prose, but even though I don't like rhyme, I enjoy prose.. Anyways, I think the only suggestion I have in way of approving this is; I think this would look a lot better left aligned... I know it's not a big deal, but presentation is important to poetry.. However the poem is marvelous no matter where it is, even if it were up-side down....
Best wishes fellow Poet, and best of luck in the contest,
Shirley
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