I once saw a boy
With a spring in his step
Striding out to the world
Seeking
I now see a man
With a frame built of strength
Making more of this world
Honorably
I once held a boy
Close and whispery sweet
Holding hope in his hands
Gently
I now hold a man
Touching richness and warmth
Weaving brocades from threads
Artfully
I once kissed a boy with
The passion of life
Wanting all to be known
Completely
I now kiss a man with
The yearning of youth
Tasting dreams still to be
Deeply
I once loved a boy
Whose heart drew you in
To its wonder and awe
Gracefully
I double love this muse
With his new penny shine
Face up - in the sun
Luckily.
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Written May 14th, 2003
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Awww ..how lucky you are Janey, you found a shiny penny and after all this time he shines soley for you...sounds like a keeper to me. I bet he makes you feel like you are the only woman on this planet ..i love it Jane and yes you may proceed to gush even further through im
I'm tickled..and grinning like a fool..see? ---->
Love ya Petal,
galfalfa
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How we all feel when we first click on that submit button.Then await the reactions to the dirty deed.
As you did with me i stepped back to read,and a pleasure it was to do so.
That one can look with love after thirty years with the same eyes ,while noticing how the the years have passed is a wonderful thing.I feel you had no need to fear that first posting as this piece clearly showed that you had much to offer the readers.
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Awww... it must be old poem day around here today, for this is the very first write I ever posted at AP. It still tickles me to think back to that moment of decision. Should I, shouldn't I, should I... LOL Thanks for the visit and the compliment.
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Well done
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I like the structure of this poem. Nice, nice, nice!
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This is marked by warmth and love throughout. It's so wonderful to see memories grow into tangible realities.
Sincerely,
Leo Long -
SH-- i don't now what to say that's a wounderful write you should be proud of that poem it's alsome i look's like a lot of people loved any way it waz all some i love it keep writing and some one will read have fun keep it coming from the heart gdog x peace out breakkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkk
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Isn't is wondeful when life becomes a brocade tapestry rich and warm from the individual strands woven every day. The comparison between the boy's enthusiasm and the maturity of a man mellowed by wisdom is done so well in this poem. The sunny ending is lovely, because the vibrance of youth is retained with a hope for the future. Especially like the metaphor of the face-up penny. With a love like that, though, luck is just a side benefit.
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you seems to like it in ur old age now u kiss a boy but later you kiss a man wow u like the way u blend your self with love a love that is going to last if i may say it seems to that you are geting another love after a first love too...
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this is wonderful i like thsi poem u knoI once held a boy
Close and whispery sweet
Holding hope in his hands
Gently
I now hold a man
Touching richness and warmth
Weaving brocades from threads
Artfully
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i really like your style. this poem is very nice a,d sweet. i admire your ability to write so gracefully. if words can have a healing power i think you capture that.
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MXC, (too lazy to master the spelling of your moniker), Thanks. It strikes me that the origins of this write kinda go back to where you and Ayla are right now. I guess I can only hope that these moments taste as sweet to you when you reach my old age as these do to me. Best of luck. ... and don't worry, poetry has a way of unmixing a lot of stuff for you. (grins)
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I liked it a lot.. it just sorta flows along... not all mixed up a lot of mine!! :-) good job jane!!
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Some really nice and sweet descriptions in this poem. I think it is very nice You have done an excellent job.
Scott -
Subtle
A lullaby of a poem.
Some more of your potent images and "linking":
"I once held a boy
Close and whispery sweet"
and
"I now kiss a man with
The yearning of youth"
You bridge the 30-year gap tenderly yet masterfully.
Excellent! Good luck in the contest!
Best,
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Whoops!!! Congrats for the contest!!!
Edited on May 11, 7:10 p.m. because 'Blindness'. -
This is a great bit of writing and I dodn't think I have ever told you how much
David -
Now that is quite a compliment!!! But perhaps you should stop reading now, while I'm still ahead.
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You're a great writer! Haven't read anything you've written that I haven't loved. Keep sharing hun! I look forward to reading...
~ Allie -
Sweet poem! This poem does have great flow to it...My fave stanza is definately "I double love this muse
With his new penny shine
Face up - in the sun
Luckily."
You have so much talent! I cannot wait to read more. BTW, you had the right idea when you were commenting on my poem. TY 4 sharing!
Keep it up!
!~*YS4e*~!
Scarlett
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to watch and support a soul grow in time and love
is the sweetest gift of them all!!
Tamara -
this is a beautiful poem! Its cool how you switch back and forth, i did that one between a Kitten and a Tiger, but i didnt put it up here. Thanks for entering!! and good luck you did a great job!
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this is a beautiful poem, i love how you switch back and forth in this persons history, it's great to read, and this poem also flows very well, good job, good luck, and keep writing!!!
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