Snow flakes fall the ground,
And disappear in an instant,
Just like he left me here alone.
My friends told me he was wrong for me,
In the beginning,
But did I listen? No.
I was so ignorant.
I saw his true nature unravel,
Like a string on a spool of thread,
Like a flower opening at the first sign of spring,
But your sign was me.
Your eyes meet mine for the last time,
But I turn away,
Realizing there's a stronger me,
Deep inside, but I must find her.
It will not be easy,
I know I have to try,
But what is life without a little challenge?
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This is creativily done, I like your style. Although i did find some parts hard to read. But other than that it was awesome and I think many people relate to it.
Thanks for entering and goodluck.
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Our friends always know don't they? Love sort of blinds us and yet they see it clearly. Do we listen? Of course not, at least not a first. Excellent poem here.
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i love the first and secind stanza, it gives you a pure setting of emotion.
thankyou for entering the contest and good luck,
chardonnay -
This is lovely in that the message is a great one especially for girls and young women. I think a lot of women think they have to have a guy in their lives in order to be happy, but true happiness is inside each of us. You've expressed yourself very well in the poem and offered some nice insights. Thank you for your entry and good luck in the contest.
Best wishes,
~J. -
"My friends told me he was wrong for me,
In the beginning,
But did I listen? No.
I was so ignorant"
omg its like my life story..nah im kidding but thats wat i think bout my ex n me..."It will not be easy,
I know I have to try" thats kinda wat im doing now...not talking to my ex cuz im sick of his shit...this is a great poem...sorry bout my ranting...lol...good work and good luck
xox Tash
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good lob you followed the rules
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this was a great masterppiece! Among the greats I would say! keep up the good work!
joe
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Ausome! Ausome! I loved It! great job my friend! joe
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Very nice
"Snow flakes fall the ground, And disappear in an instant, Just like he left me here alone." this works so well with the content, I see how you were droped out of his life with no return. I love how you added a little twist at the end with "But what is life without a little challenge?", you feel that there is still hope after he is gone.
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Indeed
Thank you very much, in many ways this was created to show girls that just because of a break up, or what not, you should always strive to find strength rather than moping about what has happened.
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booyah inner strength lol excellent work
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