Beyond these four walls the pale walls
The tile flooring
My solitude
My salvation
Looking down studying my fingers
My nails no longer apart of my body
They have taken on new life
The little knifes
I take into the bronze flesh of my forearm
Making crescent marks upon them
Leaving ugly black scars
Breaking skin
The pain I don't feel
I fell in love with the pain
At my fingertips
I whimper at the pleasure
Knowing there will be a next time
No one can hurt me
I whether feel this pain then nothing at all
Beyond these four walls I can't be harmed
No one can touch me
With there wicked hands or their hurtful words
My panic room
My solitude
My salvation
Author notes
This is true and this is my life that's all I can say 
In a list
A contest entry
- [[Darling]] I'll miss everything that ever went wrong. by SarahEatsAirplane.
340 points, ended April 15, 2007, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Honey its +beautiful+ like a m e n t a l illness by AshliiAsphyxiation.
600 points, ended April 26, 2007, 11 entries
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Hmm... This one actually reminds me of a poem I wrote last year, called "My Sacred Space", the only difference being that mine was the sanctuary that wasn't really a sanctuary, though I did see some of the same aspects in your poem. In short, very good, and I thoroughly enjoyed every last line... I could almost hear Amy Lee's voice in the background So sorry, though, that this is what you are going through, but thank you for having the strength to share with us. Well done!
Best wishes,
L.
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i love the title, and the piece. everything flows together smoothly...nothing is forced. although sad, and a horrible feeling, others can relate. i could at one point. sometimes i still can, but i've gotten better. if you ever need anything just let me know, i am here. and thank you for sharing this piece in the reading list.
~bee
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Now This is AMAZING
This is probably my favorite.
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Hey, just wonderin' if you need help or anything...you know,just hit me up, I'm willing to help. Okay? It's only if you want to, no one's ordering you to.
other than that, you know, a couple grammar/spelling misses. It's easy to miss them in a spellcheck program. (stupid comps!) Anyway, good job and good luck, okay?
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very good
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wow, this is very good i can relate. I FELT the emotion. thank you for entering my contest i wish you luck!
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thanks for entering and good luck
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Beautiful darling. Every word was capturing. I loved this so much. I loved this and was entranced by every word.
Great job and good luck in the contest.
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i know the feeling, i used to do this all the time, i know what its like so yea. good luck in the contest
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NIce..nicely written. had very great sad emotion. i could sense it.
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Wow
The way this was writen, Gives it a sad yet very seious attitude about it. I think it is extreamly good and i love how the last 2 lines are written twice, it makes those words stand out more. I know life gets tough, and it will eventually get better. Great job. -
This is well written, flowed beautifully. The subject is such a sad one and I wish you well. I pray you can some day learn to feel without the pain. Best of luck.
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Thank you so much for your comment it really means alot to me that you took the time to read and comment on my poem. And again thank you!
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A Dark Serenity
I know of such a familiar keep, on a cold mountain deep in the heart of an arctic realm.
A bleak, but safe haven far from the hot hells of reality.
Surrounded by a deep chasm of denial and thick walls of vague allusion with a thousand archers atop them armed with sharp tipped lies to defend against the stoutest forces of inquisition.
Home is where the heart is (entombed
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-cheers
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I truly loved this poem. It shows how it feels to hurt yourself, and you described it so well. I, personally, just got over an eating disorder, and I had to learn that it's NOT ok to hurt yourself. You need to tell someone, maybe your mom, because even if she doesn't necessarily like it, she still loves you and will do what she can to help.
Hope I helped!
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Blissful
this is bliss in fucking words. the emotion, the raw emotion, was just so intoxicating!!! i absolutely love this!! beautiful!
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holy shit that was unbeliveablely fucking awsome that was just raw right to the bone damn
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girl... I LOVE YOUR STUFF. that was really great. I loved the word choice and it flowed nicly. You really did a great job on this one... *CLAPS* and thanks for posting it on the group. It's nice not being the only one that has
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wow, this was great. awsome job
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wow i luv it. its so dark so beautiful i love how you say that the pain is pleasurable. this i feel is the glamorous take on cutting lol.
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well every one has a place for their solitude but i think ur's is unique.. this write is pretty dark well but need some touch ups(well if u want to)...there is no rhyming anywhere excpt 7 and 8 that also seems forced rhyming..that shows u had more to express but the words where not that worthy to be filled in.. as u have broken sentences i loved it..that makes it dark
u should work on its imagery its blunt especially that 5 and 6 line is the main part of ur write so instead of that two lines u could added more
Looking down studying my fingers
My nails no longer apart of my body
its just dosnt sound correct, when i try to imagine it, i feel u should need a coma or sumthin to seperate this line into two parts then it be better.
and the this line
They have taken on new life
The little knifes
i feel forced rhyming here as i said b4...instead of "life" u could have used "form"..also needs an article "a"- they have taken on 'a' new life..
the little knife-these little knife..gives a nice effect and i feel ur 13 and 14 line if u jus vice verces them thats means bring the 14 line before 13 the flow would be much better..
i woudnt be bothered to write this much if i dint see potiential in you..well i hope u understand what im sayin..i dont mean anythin personal..its ur work its ur wish..i jsu said what i felt
regards my fellow poet
abuyi -
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i understand and I accept your opinion.
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Darkness can only last so long.
Trixie girl come out of your panic room now. Don't listen to their hurtful words. Don't give your self ulgy scars. No one is worth that. You are alive and your poetry is too beautiful for you to be feeling nothing at all. So I send you a great big hug and an It will be all right.
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Wow Dark!
It's a great written piece my friend. Dark sure and this is how we all feel at some point in life and if someone says never, they're just lying to themselves. I specially love the lines...The pain I don't feel
I fell in love with the pain. Beautifully written feelings.
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Great write, Keep it up. Only problem I see is that in the first line, it sounds as though it should be broken into two lines, other than that, good work
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Loved It!!
A really good write, keep up the good work!!! Love!!
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