The winter has come
And frost settles upon this land
But no one knows
That the greatest cold of all
Is deep inside the heart
Of the one you loved.
I keep a box
Full of your memory
In the depths of my mind
And even if it was nothing to you
I meant it
When I said forever, love.
You will always be
In the back of my head
And your sweet voice
It haunts my dreams
Haven't slept since you left
Such a long time, my love.
No drink
Can put you in the past
No miracle drug
To wipe you out
For a year of my life
Such a long time to erase
My love.
And I know
Deep inside
That the pain will never end
How sad, though true
That my first love
Be my last.
For the sounds
Of the church bells
On Sunday mornings
Serve to remind me
Of loss and bitterness
And I wish
With all my heart
That the flowers
Would die faster.
Anything, everything
Reminds me of you
My favourite song
The wind in my hair
And every word
I ever penned
For you, and you alone
My love.
But one day, love
I will remember
The song in my heart
The fire in my soul
And not the poisoned speech
You left me with.
For this love
Knows no bounds
Though I am on my own, now
Ashes to dust
Lovers to friends
For I know
That fate will never
Bring you back to me.
But trust me, when I say
That I am sorry
For you will never know
A love so steadfast and true
So pure, so real
So powerful as mine.
* * *
The winter has gone
The ice gives way to green
But no one knows
That, deep inside the heart
Of the one you loved
It is winter, all year long.
Author notes
40. Here it’s December, everyday.
He was everything to me, and I never took a minute of it for granted. Despite the fact that it ended badly, my heart will always be with him, for so long as blood flows through my veins.
So this is dedicated to my Angel, the one whom I will never forget. I will always love you and, no matter what they told you, you are never alone.
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A contest entry
- Lyrically Inspired. ♫ by La Tua Cantante.
440 points, ended February 15, 2008, 5 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Peer Pressure (Vote) - 3 (last, if nobody shows interest) by xxRainbowDawnxx.
450 points, ended April 2, 2008, 12 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - several choices by theflamepoetess.
450 points, ended April 23, 2008, 6 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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this is heart wrenching. a very emotive write. so sad full of longing. there is something special about a first love - and what follows it can seem to pale in comparison. you have captured the loss of that completely. i relate to this.
congratulations on the trophies! -
Great write
I can relate to this poem. I know how cold it can be after someone you love leaves you. It happend to me after six years of marriage. She was no longer happy and I wasn't going to force her to stay. To this day if I hear certain songs or see somthing realy beautiful I'd wish she was where I was so I could share it with her but oh well it wasn't ment to be.
So yes this was a great write
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it has such brillant emotion and such raw feeling, i love it, best of luck to you
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Wow, this is really good. Full of feeling. Great write. Good luck in the contest.
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Heart-wrenching and beautiful. I absolutly adore this. Amazing write.
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I love this entry, the way it combined a dying love with winter was very emotionally fealt and a feat of pure genious. I was a bit put off because the poem was a bit longer than I would have liked at first, but the first words that entered my mind from this poem had me hooked beyond comprehension. It was such a lovely, sad poem. Great job and good luck.
Hugs and Kisses,
Tiphanie -
I can see why you recieved an honorable mention in another contest. This is quite good. i enjoyed this very much. You best recieve many votes.
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Excellent write you did a very nice job with this Good luck with it in the contest I hope you get lots of votes >.<
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This is excellent. The memories we hold are so precious. You have really done an awesome job at expressing your emotions. A very deep piece, superbly penned. All the best in the contest with it
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O.O Wow,
This is really a very good write. It really makes the reader feel the pain the heartache. You are very good at portraying Emotion very discriptive Love it.
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I felt that there were a few cliched lines in this, but I thought that the overall feel of the poem was nicely done. It was a beautiful write, and I had great flow to it.
Best wishes,
dani -
This is a breath-taking write; it’s so detailed and beautiful. I love the repetition of the word “love” throughout it; it makes it even more extraordinary. My favorite parts of it are:
“You will always be
In the back of my head
And your sweet voice
It haunts my dreams
Haven't slept since you left
Such a long time, my love.”
And
“Anything, everything
Reminds me of you
My favourite song
The wind in my hair
And every word
I ever penned
For you, and you alone
My love.”
It seems like you really lost someone that you care deeply about. I know the feeling. And it will never truly fade away. Enchanting.
Thank you and good- luck in my contest.
- La Tua Cantante.
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I can't even find any words to describe the perfection in this piece. It explains so much, and you can really feel the pain...great job!
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Awesome. I'm lost for words.
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Very sad but remember he is off shagging lots of birds and has totally forgotten about you so why not just settle down with a nice book?
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Thank you for your heartfelt entry, Josephine
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Am I to take you at your word of this winning contests? Perhaps you removed it after you won eh? Let me know...
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Wow, this was so sad.. I could feel my own heart break as I read your amazing poem. You really made me feel your lost love! It was really beautiful and I am glad you shared.
Thanks for entering and good luck!
Sleep-N -
What an amazing write...absolutely beautiful imagery and a powerful message. Thank you so much for entering, and I wish you the best of luck! Keep up the stunning work. xoxo
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wow. This was really fantastic.
The winter has gone
The ice gives way to green
But no one knows
That, deep inside the heart
Of the one you loved
It is winter, all year long.
I loved this part. Its so true. This did exactly what i wanted. It made me super sad. It reminded me of the one i love that left. I will always love him no matter what. this was amazing thank you for entering it into the contest.
I'm sorry that you've had this experience as well. ~hugs~ great job -
I feel like I could have written this myself. So much of this hit very close to home. For instance:
"And I know
Deep inside
That the pain will never end
How sad, though true
That my first love
Be my last."
and of course:
"But trust me, when I say
That I am sorry
For you will never know
A love so steadfast and true
So pure, so real
So powerful as mine."
This really had an emotional effect on me. I truly hope you do well in the contest. Your author note is touching as well.
So sorry that you must deal with the pain of heartache.
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Until reading authors note I believed the poem was about a boyfriend or maybe husband who had died. I guess that was the only part that I would make a suggestion on. Other then that, I think it was beautifily written.
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*speechless*
This is...indescribable. The feeling I have taken from this cannot find a word to place its meaning in. I...wish I had more to say...I just hope that my unspoken words show you how much I truly want to say.
~FoDF
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Beautiful Write
so full of emotion,bringing every word into a full circle of love.The way you feel with each given moment.Your brushed words flow with a divine stroke to paint such a heartfelt picture of a lost love.
Great Write...
God Bless
~Cheryl~ -
This is a really wonderful write....
you did exactly what I wanted...
It made me feel so sad and be able to relate...
Great job Good luck in the contest!!!!
E~R~I~N -
I felt the sadness, i know that pain, i know that love. i could almost see the memory as if they where mine own. This is pure emotion and real. Reading this, i felt as if you where naked inside hiding curled up in a coner baring your heart. This is truth, fact and raw pain. I feel like reading this, i invaded your mind on a very personal level. GREAT write!
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Wonderful and beautifully written.I've been there and I'm terribly sorry for your loss as well. One day you will be able to see all the truths and one day, if it's meant for you, he'll come back.I'm always here if you wanna talk. Great write,thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
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