Blinded by star light
My vigil touching the soft sky’s frontier,
my companions and witnesses stars will be,
my soul and body captivated
in the world of your tune's energy waves,
free to fly, free to be...
I’ll swirl, and twirl, following Earth's drunken whirl,
led by the drums in my heart I will go there...
Where...
the heavens open their doors.
Author notes
Belly dance
In a list
A contest entry
- The Arabian Nights by Rinoasis.
460 points, ended January 19, 2008, 3 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Dance For Me by Celticmoon.
875 points, ended June 5, 2008, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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'swirl' and 'twirl' through 'heavens' open doors
s s fly free very vibrant
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Wow, amazing poem. Well done! You certainly did inspire me now.
Very good imagery used. Thanks for entering this!
Blessings,
~Moonchild
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Really great
It is short but, I fail to say, 'simple' I like it being a metamorphic play of 9 lines...full of meaning and captured or rather I should say, kidnapped beauty...sorry, for typos, if any or many
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Hi Pole Star! Contest rules said ten, I can't find the tenth, lol, so my dance will be, m aybe different?
Why kidnapped beauty? lol Each beauty is uniqe itself. Thanks for you kind comment. And about typos, welcome to the club. I am "able" to do the same without keyboard, just give me a pencil and paper.
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lol Kidnapped, in the sense, such a lot of beauty won't like to stay in one thread, it will like to spread to show itself to everyone, but you kidnapped them all in this work
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Sonja as usual your words dance with grace to weave a picture of imaginative beauty...you must have a golden pen in your hand because I always find your work so charming and sometimes quite magical...this piece has a wonderful spiritual feel to it...
'free to fly, free to be' this phrase made me want to read it over again and again...thank you for this wonderful piece and I wish you well in the contest
Love and smiles...
~lilac~
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Dear Lilac, your comments are always great support to me and my poetical work. I am always trying to fell whatever I am talking about, I am trying to see the things not only with my eyes. I saw the same within your verses and because of that I know that you know what I am talking about. We all have our physical and spiritual part of personality. The hardest way always was to walk on the edge of both. Thanks for comment and good wishes.
~Sonja~
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EXCELLENT
This is just excellent....
Very well done. I love a brief poem...and this is a perfect example of packing a wallop in a short write...
Great job.
I feel like putting on my dancing shoes and steppin' out tonight!
Blessings! Tammy -
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Thanks Tammy! Many years ago I was adictet to gym, I like to dance too. That was the best feelings - body in the rhytm of music. I am glad yo like it.
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Lovely free verse. Very nice presentation. Very good flow and tone. Lovely expression of emotion and word choice. Elegant. Well crafted and a much enjoyed read. Shelley
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Captivating!
Your words spin like a ballerina in dance, Sonja. This is lovely! A metaphorical masterpiece!
~Lori
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Thank you dear Lori. You can see that I am floating in the space and time between free verses and rhyme. Shhhhh...it's not a secret, I like ballet.
Yes, this is metaphorical, it had to be to fit this contest rules. I am glad you like it.
~Sonja~
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I like how this group has poets of all different talent levels and to see us all coming together helping each other improve. Not too lengthy, and not too wordy, but a wonderful poem... beautiful ending and a very fitting poem for this contest. Well done! Thanks for sharing
--Tim
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This was a beautiful poem with love and merriement in the air.
Sis This was beautiful I love it. I will let you know what the doctor says next week.
Love you
Morningstar
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BEautiful
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THIS IS VERY BEAUTIFUL!
I can just feel myself flying up to meet those stars shining so bright and inviting. As I come close a brilliant light shines on me with a warm feeling that flows ever so gently into my heart. So very lovely Sonja.
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I like the imageries produced within this write and my favourite line is
"free to fly, free to be..."
It captivates feelings of longing, yearnings related to by many people. Your word choices here are good and this is overall a very good attempt. Thanks for sharing. I hope you're well. Love you much. Laura
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