I can’t seem to remember
Everything is a big blur
I can’t see it even with wide open eyes
The path of yester years
That you now seem to remember
But at your own convenience
It was you who left me alone
With tons of baffling questions
Leaving me to believe you were gone
But only to come back with responses
Little I knew, you were nothing but full of lies
Who knew to fall in love and never to rise
I don’t doubt your sincerity you had then
But it faded before we could begin our journey
I chose then to let you go
Be the older son to fulfill your duty towards your parents
I understood your feelings and what it meant
To have the blessings of one’s parents
For you, I waited whole heartedly
Only to get the news when it was old and weary
Not from you as I’d requested for you to tell me but from no body
You were not only married, but now had a baby
How could you fall in love with me
And not have the courage to wait for me
Could have not gone against your parents
But didn’t had to decide to go against me either
Waiting for your parents to agree
All you had to do wait patiently
For I was ready to stand by your side and waited with you
Instead you chose the easier way out
Cried blaming everyone for our demise
When all who needs to be blamed is really you
It’s funny how you came back
After such a long gap…
More than 11 years have passed
And now you have the audacity to remind
Me of our past with an offer that you think is good
Enough for me, live with you till the end
With the fact walking beside
Your not divorced which might be till the end of the road
Thank you but no thank you for your concern
You know now I’m alone
Everything that has happened to me with my ex
You have overflowing love you say for me
It will be better if used on your family
For I don’t need any of your sympathy
I took care of myself when you left
I survived then, I’d already learnt
From you, the feelings of heart break
I can still do it and let me, with dignity
If nothing else, have a little respect
For our past relation and love even if it was short lived
For I some how had admiration for you
Atleast for keeping your promise to your family
Don’t ruin it by your false pretence
That we can fill up the long gap
You created in the past
To create and make our new present
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I loved it! Yep yep loved it! Okay well who doesn't love your poems? It's amazing the way you have such a great talent!:
I want to borrow your braiins then I'd be a great poet
But I can't because even with your brains I couldn't be as good as you in writing poems or in anything for that matter. Well I'm off to read you other poems, lol okay ones that are for my age. Take care!
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such strength and determination in these words, and i am sincerely sorry for your sorrow and struggle, but you seem to be the stronger for it, that however does not remove the painor the memory of it, but you havechosen to take a stand in this poem, very well written and tells me just how strong you really are, excellent and good for you
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Thank You So Much Mr. OC2
Thank you for reading and understanding my poem. I don't know about my strength, I sure know one thing I'm confused as hell. Oh well, this is life...ups and downs...hope I don't drown. I had to take a stand, I did love him and admired him at the time he doesn't want to abandon his parents because of whom he is what he is. But he didn't have to leave me either...if he would've chosen this, it would have take perhaps long time, but then where there is a will, there is always a way & my dad always tells me you have to have a strong will, I guess he didn't. Anways, long story short, thanks so much for thoughful comment, as usual.
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good
great job
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Jess Honey Thanks a Lot!
Thanks Hun! thank you so very much for taking time to read my poems.. I really appreciate you giving me your points in the form of applauds. I'm running out of words to express my thanks to you. But still thanks.
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Long. it was but very well written. It didn't flow as well as it should but al together it was good to read. and it had alot of emotion in it. nice
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Thank you for your honesty
Thank you so very much for taking time off of your busy life and critique my writing...there is always room for improvisation, I strongly abide by...Please if you would have any time spare in your pocket, you are free to edit my poem the way you think it will be better and I will appreciate it. This is just how I felt when I was recently in this situation. Once again, thanks a lot for your honest appreciation.
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Super Write
This is a very clear and understandable write. It is a poem that reads like a story of love long ago. This actually happened to a friend of mine a few days ago. Same similar story. The guy wanted to come back after he had a problem in his relationship, after a long period of absence. She turned him down also.I'm really glad that you shared this write because it reminded me of that. I love your title, it fit the poem just right. This is a fantastic write. Keep your pen flowing and your writes comming.
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Thanks a lot!
I'm so glad you like it and enjoyed reading it. This is the reality I had to face last month. I was mad thinking of the way he ended, I was hurt with his offer and happy that he still remembered every little detail. Overall I don't really know how I felt. I hope no one goes through this ever. ONce again thanks a lot for your time an dcomment. Encouragement is what makes us move ahead and thanks for your encouragement.
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