Clinging to his back,
Sailing above the Earth,
As light fades to darkness,
Gazing down to get a Demon's eye view,
at the tiny planet in the distance.
Seeing a world broken down by corruption,
Gardens of greed grow rampant,
covered by blankets of hatred and misery.
Grasping the Demon tighter,
As yet he flies higher,
Staring into complete darkness,
Feeling peaceful relief,
In the freedom of the Demon Kingdom.
Thankful for the wings of Spawn,
For showing me life,
Beyond Earth's putrid atmosphere,
As we dance in the dead light,
I wish to reside here for eternity,
Away from Sorrow's grasp.
Author notes
It's not greatly written in my point of view but, Here It Is
Written May 13th, 2003
A contest entry
- Your best prewrite by glazecovered.
300 points, ended February 23, 2004, 274 entries
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I got really confizzled. I'm not sure what it really said but I liked the words that you used.
keep up the good work and good luck.
Continue shining,
Baby Star -
mm...It confused me for a while...but that's due to lack of caffeine in my system...=) I really like your vocabulary in this poem, it's rather fancy if you compare it to some of the other poems I have in this contest. Very insightful piece, I like it. Actually, you had me at "Demons." Love poems about the dark, the evil, and the devilish. Thanks for entering and good luck.
~Anastasia -
this is a really cool poem keep writing and always share your poetryfriend
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reflective
demons are of darkness,but the demon that took you for that ride didn't controll what you came away with after the ride.you took the demon to a different height and instead it it changing you,you changed it.the is a most deep work.you pulled this one from your soul.good luck. -
Although time-old traditions dictate that demons are creatures of evil, hate and darkness, there are always ways of looking at things. Interpretation is everything, and you have found the key. Flying as an escape, away fromthe sorrows of the Earth, painted a wonderfully peaceful picture in my mind. Your words flow in a new, refreshing way. Your style is also very well-fitting to the subject of the poem. Maybe it's me, but I saw the Demon as an addiction, some black, eveil thing we can sink completely into, forming our own escape in the thing which will eventually hurt us the most. Sinking down or rising high will provide a bleak escape, however short-lived, that comforts us in our sorrow
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Cartwheels
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This is an excellant peice of work. The way you articulate your words so clearly is very rarly found in a poem. Very good Anewdaywilldawn "zeppelin"
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Worship satan!
I like this. Who said demons had to be about hate and horror. Oh... spawnworship and demonwithin said so? I guess if they say so, then I'll have to agree. But demons and darkness are still cool in my little mind. So suck on that. I think I have heard a song by "Tenacious D" that mentions flying on the wings of a demon. This reminds me of that. I like this. I want to fly... -
Nice, Nice. I liked that a lot. It reminded me of some dark fantasy tail. Very good indeed
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so, so good!!!
oh man, this is really good...if i say any more i'm afraid i will ruin it. good job!
justiney... -
wow.. i like this!! demons and hate and greed.. all things we c but that rnt real.. i believe all this is self brought.. if u wish not to be sad and to learn and never regret.. u will always stand happy and strong! u r a lot stronger.. and i am glad u appricate people that help u.. thanks spawn.. they sure seem to help a lot of people around here
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For me, demons are generally associated with darkness, evil and hate. I found it interesting how you've spun a different picture of them. The poem is very well constructed and has a very nice rhythm and flow to it. The wording is very strong. I like it.
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good
This is good. And I disagree with redstormy about a demon being a bad thing :P.
Thanks a bunch for the comment on "time" I appreciate it. Though I disagree that it was good. But I'm still pleased.
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Oh I like this poem very much, but a demon is not a good thing. Maybe a fairy or an angel. Interesting choice you have chosen here. Demons are about hate and evil. *scratching head in confusion* But as for the rest of the poem you did a very nice job, no wasted words. Good writing.
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Good job
Wow this is awesome..you can like feel it cuz ur explaining it so well!! great job!
Jen -
guilty
hungry yes, vengeful always, and we care for our own, you have been accepted.... for now... welcome to this realm... but beware, the things here bite... and theyre bite is infectious... dont pet anything lest you share our fate...~is gone in a puff of nothing ness~ -
Welcome Never, in your hand i place the key of passage. You will find me when you need. You have a friend in darkness. Well done never, i would have never guessed that you would be bold enough to hold on so long. I would have thought that you would have closed your eyes to the sights i have shone. You are more than i expected. Do not abuse your new found power Never, becareful. We become nasty creatures when provoked, we're always hungry. Well done. Taken, that you took in all you have seen. (sinks into the darkness)
~Spawn~
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