I can see you so perfectly in my mind.
A picture that I can keep, even if I were to become blind.
I sit inside my head and watch my memories perform for me a play.
I find myself able to be with you, every day.
Here, you are never to far.
You seem to me like some obtainable star.
Then I am faced with the cruelty that is reality.
And my once beautiful, pure, memories become a showing of tragedy.
Realizing that you are no longer mine and you are with him.
Though your light has now become ever so bright, mine has become ever increasingly dim.
I hope that you have found peace.
And I know that you hope my pain will ease.
My love for you still burns every part of my being.
Love,heed not my words,for they are just a poor fools thoughts of a once perfect dream.
Although now it seems I will never again get to call you mine.
All I need to is close my eyes, and once again we are one.
You and me, forever, in my memory.
Author notes
option 4; you get the idea or do you?
A contest entry
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‘I hope that you have found peace.’ Sweet sentiment there, I enjoyed your poem.
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Very nice. I liked this one. The lines' length threw me off a little, but it needed to be done to convey the message, so I'll get over it. lol Good job! Good luck in the contest, and thanks for entering!
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an interesting take on the theme
thanks for entering
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Wonderful flow to this poem. Nice use of words and poet devices. Thank you for a great entry.
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So full of emotion and love. Such a wonderful memory of love, good luck in my contest
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A sweet and heart-felt memory of love. Thank you so much for entering and best wishes!
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I do get the idea and it's a very lovely piece. I loved the use of rhyme also and it's sometimes hard for people to do. Great Write!
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thank you
i always appreciate constructive critizism, but i like positive things even more.
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