i sit at night
and start to cry
with every thought of you
a piece of me dies
you were my best friend
you kept me going
with those few years
my friendship started showing
the day your life ended
mine did too
i cry at night
because of you
i can't let you go
you're a part of me
i'm trying to move on
it is hard you see
i was happy
with you by my side
ever since you died
every night i have cried
you meant so much
with you gone it is bad
since your not here to comfort me
I stay sad
two years flew by
since your death
things have changed
since you were put to rest
i still see your face
but only in my dreams
this is how it is meant to be
or so it seems
i still cry for you
even though you're gone
i still think of you
it is what keeps me going on
i still hear your voice
i still hear your laugh
there is one thing i know
that is not easy to craft
tears of sadness
still fall for you
i cant believe your gone
it is to good to be true
this fire still burns
within my heart
i'm still pissed at that little bitch
that tore your world apart
the day your life ended
mine did as well
and since you've been gone
i feel my life is a livin' hell
i cant stop the tears
that consume my eyes
with every tear that falls
another part of me die
so goodbye chris
your still alive in my eyes
but this is
my final goodbye
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again so powerful, its just sad that you had to experience such pain, but still again a great write! and you should post some new poems, i think your newest was posted in july was it?
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i know it hurt me to have to go through this but this is how i get my poetry out and how it gets so wonderful through all my tragedies. and i will post new ones soon
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this is really sad but i love this poe
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an interesting point of view for the situation. You give this feeble strength that i find so heart wrnching though. It's like you want to fight, but you aren't sure if its the right thing to do. In some parts of the poem your calling this girl "dirty little bitch" and others your falling away from the main subject. it gives two different perspectives, and i love how it shows the personal conflict going on inside of you.
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wow this is another amazing strong poem i hope things are ok now
my fav' lines are:
'ou were my best friend
you kept me going
with those few years
my friendship started showing
the day your life ended
mine did too
i cry at night'
because of youthese are the lines i can relate to,this is an amazing heartwrench poem.great but sad.and:...
so goodbye chris
your still alive in my eyes
but this is
my final goodbye ,tears* well done amazing write
all the best.x
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thank you so much
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Hey Neice
This is really really sad. I like it a lot.With the rythem it just kind of flows out. Good Job.
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man that was heart wrenching, but it was AWESOME for what it was supposed to be, i can relate to some of the lines of this poem because a little bitch ripped my heart out a little while ago and i had a hard time getting over that, (i still hurt at points and it will never be completely healed until i find another girl that i could spend my life with) but until then, i move on. oh and also
tears of sadness
still fall for you
i cant believe your gone
it is to good to be true
this part sounded like you were glad he's gone?
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yep that is the way it was
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Awww, losing a bestfriend is ALWAYS heart-breaking!!!
*Cries* what a heart-wrenching POEM =((( booohooo!!!
the day your life ended
mine did too
i cry at night
because of you
i can't let you go
you're a part of me
i'm trying to move on
it is hard you see
these parts are so sad and electrifying!!!
you meant so much
with you gone it is bad
since your not here to comfort me
I stay sad
two years flew by
since your death
things have changed
since you were put to rest
sounds stronger here, yea you have built some muslce here...
i still see your face
but only in my dreams
this is how it is meant to be
or so it seems
goes back to sadness and memories of the person, awwww, the memories can't go away can they? they always remain...tragic!!!
the day your life ended
mine did as well
and since you've been gone
i feel my life is a livin' hell
i cant stop the tears
that consume my eyes
with every tear that falls
another part of me die
this part...the words, they're like flooded with your tears...this poem is catching them...like handkerchief...it's great u can write this out, get it off your chest..SO SAD...(if this is about u)...
Chris...=( sad poem....anyway KEEP STRONG i bet Chris doesn't want you to always be SAD but smile for him...he's watching u.....anyway, KEEP THIS POEMS up I LIKE IT..it's VERY sad...but yea, reality has its ups and downs...tragedy and happiness...yup...GOOD POEM!!!
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wow ur verry talented at writi
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wow i relle dislike this poem its relle crappy
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Amazing...It comes to close to how I felt once before. This poem is beyond beautiful...its simply amazing
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loved it
geez. that is so sad but really good. i really like this. almost brought a tear to me.
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A-M-A-Z-I-N-G
Wow! This poem is so sad. I can relate, seeing as my mother and 2 sisters died when I was 9. 4 years have passed since then, but it's still very hard. I really liked this poem! I hope this is nothing personal! I can see you expressed your emotions very well in this poem! I'd be really grateful if you entered this poem into my contest! I really liked it! My favorite line are
"this fire still burns
within my heart " Take care! I'm adding you as my favorite so I can read more of your new poems. Until then take care! Byebye!
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sad...
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Heartfelt
Wow sis this is amaxzing. I'm very sorry for your loss. I know how you feel and you're right it is very hard to go on when you lose someone so close to you. I hope things get better. Ya know I'm here for ya and that I love ya.
<3 Cat
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absoutley riveting! you capture the heartfelt pain of a loss so triumphantly. you really take that pain, and put into an art. this was amazing.
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thanks kevin
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Very heartfelt write you have penned here - easy to read and understand; sentiments well expressed in these lines. There are a afew typos that if corrected would make the poem flow a bit better -I can't believe you're gone, can't stop the tears, you're still alive in my eyes.
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Hey Beth. I know you miss Chris and it's really hard on you. I think he would have liked this poem and even though he may not be here anymore I'm sure he still knows how much you care about him. From what you've told me about him it seems like he was a great guy and he was special to you. He was lucky to have you as his friend and i'm sure he'd be happy to know that he's missed and he's remembered as a great guy. I'm sorry that you have to live without him but he would want you to be happy. You'll never forget him and i'm sure he's knows that. Well anyways great poem beth. Has some misspelled words and stuff but it's still good. Great write.
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thank you so much tifnie i do miss him a lot and you know that it is hard but i am handleing it one day at a time
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