Troubled, I stand
Trapped, in this tenement, this soul
Treading alone through this limbo, this fortress
Draped, I weep
Discarded, dark, diluted, and vague
Mere vomit beneath this visage
Raped, a whore
Filling up, on my own filth, my own flaws
A leper among her rats
Author notes
A rough day..lol
Please tell me what you think
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After looking at the photo of your inspiration, I am still left with the confusion of what is really being portrayed. Keep penning
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Wowzer!!!
I am speechless, this, wow packed a punch and then some. Good luck in the contest! -
Powerpul punch.
Powerful self incrimination poetry!! I hope you also have the power to get out of your predicament if it be true and the power to laugh at it if it isn't. Brave words and they have a hard hitting message, but it all depends on how you yourself read them. NOTHING happens unless YOU make it happen.
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A leper among her rats
i love that line for some reason...your piece was very very good short and sweet...great job good luck in the contest thanks for entering!
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WOW...AMAZING!
I am totally, completely, and thoroughly speechless.
how did you pack so much feeling and power into so few words.You have talent shooting out of your pores!
I cant even explain how much I enjoyed this poem, so Ill just shut up and go sit in the corner wishing I was half as talented. I cant believe that you commented on my poem, thank you so much, and keep writing.I think of the bible when I read this,wow.
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Wow.. this has to be the best comment I've ever gotten! this was too very kind of you.. thank you so much for reading!!
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I'm afraid to have one
of your "rough days", Dear Poet..
for if I shared the same disgust
for myself as you have portrayed here..
I admit I'd considered it a bit more than rough.
The flow of this piece is new to me..
and perfect for this work.
I'm quite impressed.
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