Last night, I saw the Angels fall,
As darkness crept around to see,
And in the fading light of autumn,
I heard them weeping mournfully
It wasn't cold or heartless,
As I breathed into the night,
For I could feel their ashy fingers,
Falling oh so silently
Last night I felt the Angels fall,
Forbidden grace and unpaid debt
The hearts so lost and weary,
With no one to protect
Their fingers graced my cheeks,
Their feathers filled my hair,
And as I stood in awe, around me
They died and lost and wept
Last night I heard the Angels fall,
A forgotten love, as old as time
In the darkness of the winter-forest,
They lost their eldritch shine...
The cries, they were not human cries,
The tears salted on the winds,
And they continued falling,
For a long-forgotten crime
Last night the Fallen called to me,
A fleeting shade, a fallen drift
Their voices called dramatically
And did their best to bewitch.
How I wanted to go out and weep,
How I wanted to join them,
But the sweet high wind and evergreens,
Whispered, this is for you to forget
Author notes
It might be a little blashphemous for me to describe angels as eldritch, but that's what they are: magical mysterious creatures hiding in the mist and shadows.
The Fallen are compared to falling snow here, so read and enjoy, or not if you prefer.
-E, Arias
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- Winter & the Holiday Season by Shadow of a Crow.
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beautifully penned. Very enjoyable read.
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magical
This piece had something about the imagery and the tone to it that kept me captivated the whole way through. It's really amazing and I imagine has deeper meaning. I think, for me at least, you put angels in a human light but still managed to keep them mysterious. I loved especially "tears salted on the winds." Really stunning work! I wish I could write like this myself. Good luck in the contest.
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Awesome Write
I always have viewed fallen angels as demons..just a personal opinion but i like your views and the song like quality of this piece...great write
KAY
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Demons and fallen are different, though slightly so. Here's how I view it, loosely: the fallen had no choice in the matter, and the majority never knew they were doing something "wrong" in god's eyes. The demons, knew, and weren't just cast out, but completely discarded, if that makes sense. A fallen angel might take slight offense to being called a demon. Eh, I don't want to go deeper into it. I have a different opinion on demons than fallen, which all stems from...something.
-E, Arias
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good write...keep up the good work and i'll check out some more of your poems...keep writing...
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Thank you, though I'm hesitant to admit that I don't write much poetry anymore (more for the stories). It was sudden inspiration; the winter months do that to me somehow. Thank you again.
-E
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