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Reflecting Brushstrokes

The brush unfolds

   upon the canvas of her life –

       fine lines, and desolate points are smeared.

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Perfection is simple imperfection:

  for he adores each twinkle of her eyes,

    and swims in the roar of her laughter.

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Perhaps it is the daisy that is cradled behind her ear,

  or the dimple that sinks into that glowing cheek;

    it is the way she listens with her heart –

          &

    answers with her soul.

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His eyes – merely reflecting pools

   that recognize the peace

       and sing in the unity.

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For what resides in him,

     also resides in her.

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Tis’ the gift of life,

&

the acceptance of love.

Author notes

I believe that beauty is what we make of our imperfections. If all were perfect, there would be no special features. We all are beautiful, but it is up to us to see our true quality.

Many blessing to your daughter... may she feel her worth!

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  • crazymomma
    August 19, 2008

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    This is beautifully written and very creative. Love and acceptance are the very heart of true beauty. Thanks for entering and good luck.


  • DK akaLunaticSerene gold member
    January 4, 2007

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    Gorgeous!

    Stunning imagery and use of poetic devices, something muddy does so fluently, very well reflected here! Loved it! Good Luck!****
    xxoo
    dk


  • Nicolette gold member
    December 2, 2006

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    Beautiful

    This is such a beautiful piece, Melanie and MuddyKing is such an inspirational writer. I am sure he'll be so honoured to read this poetic reflection! I loved the line "Perfection is simple imperfection" for in love and through love we become perfect. The last few lines are pure, powerful words of wisdom... So good to read love and beauty like this. I loved the title too - love is indeed the reflection in our loved one's eyes. Wonderfully deep, yet so very soft this poem.

    ~ Nicolette


    • luckynsincere
      December 2, 2006
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      Thanks!! I love Muddy King's work! He is so amazing to me. I am so glad that you liked this one... it actually was one of my favs to pen.

      Always,
      Mel


  • grannyeri gold member
    November 30, 2006

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    Great Presentation

    Wonderful presentation on this page - picture and poem fit together well - liked the font you usd as well. great concluding lines - bring it to a wonderful closure.


  • Laura Lamarca gold member
    November 30, 2006

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    This is a beautiful write, soft and gentle. My favourite part was
    "it is the way she listens with her heart –

    &

    answers with her soul."

    Those 2 lines say so very much to me. Well done with this and thank you for sharing. I hope you're well. Love you much. Laura

  • FindingFate
    November 30, 2006
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    You know you're good...


  • The Poetic Angel
    November 30, 2006
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    Wonderfull !

    butiful words you have penned in this and the style is just so perfik it well and trully fits the words you have used wonderfull al round ..well done and good luck in the contest... smiles ~cheeky~


  • DK akaLunaticSerene gold member
    November 29, 2006

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    Beautiful Piece!

    I haven't looked at the companion poem yet, but just wanted to say this one is just marvelous, joyous and spilling over with a full bodied loving soul!
    Good Luck!
    xxoo
    dk


    • luckynsincere
      November 30, 2006
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      DK,'
      Thanks so much. I truly appreciate your words.... The poet I chose.. well ya know him...lol. He is so very inspirational to me. Mostly because all of his poems can hold so many different meanings Thanks
      Mel


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    November 29, 2006

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    Absolutely breathtaking, Mel! Wow! Girl, this piece is just beyond awesome! ! I stand in amazement of this piece! All the best to you!


  • GorgeouslyBroken
    November 29, 2006
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    Awesome!

    Beautiful! I have to say it was one of the most beautiful things I have read in a LONG time!
    I love how you describe the girl and the connection the two lovers have. and his eyes! I am such a sucker for eyes!
    Great Job!
    Always
    Jamie

    • luckynsincere
      November 30, 2006
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      Thank you Jamie. I truly appreciate your words here
      Always,
      MElanie


  • MuddyKing
    November 29, 2006

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    excellent

    I had not seen my poem in well over a year, and I wonder what brought you to it. I think I like the reflection of yours much better than mine. The points of view in this piece are amazing and so subtle, the common language speaks volumes about the author.
    best wishes kind lady
    peace and hugs
    Muddy


    • luckynsincere
      November 29, 2006
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      Thank you Richard. I am not sure... but thank you just the same for your warm and kind words. I am flattered that you even liked this piece. Your words seemingly leaped off of your page and into my heart... thanks for be so wonderfully inspirational!!!
      Mel


  • Celticmoon
    November 29, 2006

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    Breathtaking

    As always Mel you somehow manage to steal the very breath of the reader with your sentiments and emotions. How can anyone not fall into your creativity and become lost? You always speak with a gentleness that is alien to so very many in this world today. You are truly a precious lil fay with a heart of gold........never change Mel.


    Love
    Bel


    • luckynsincere
      November 29, 2006
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      Thank you Bel... I always appreciate your wonderful words... I will never change, only of you promise the same thing


      Always,
      Mel


  • Blazing White Wolf
    November 29, 2006

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    Beautiful

    Ahem! You made me repost my comment Like I had already stated!!! What a lovely depiction of a lovely friend, My sweet lil fay your words swirl in the heart like a stick circling in the water so smooth, delicate, and intoxicating. You did great with the inverted form too! Ok well I have to do this a third time????
    Love you sweetie,
    Your Romeo


    • luckynsincere
      November 29, 2006
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      Thanks Michael... yes yes I have been updating this thing for the past few minutes I just added a link to the poem that inspired it.. and I hope you will have a look.... I found it very inspirational!!

      Love you too,
      Mel

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