You come up time and again,
I thought I buried you beneath the rubble of our words
When you said good bye you finalized the end
So how is it you still find a way to possess my mind
To carry on past natural boundaries of time
After I killed you
How do you live?
Now you are the past
Now there are no dreams that last
And true love for us wasn’t the master plan
And the forever in your words
Wasn’t real I guess
Or was it?
Do you still think of me from time to time?
Do I manage to come to life?
On the breeze a scent
Someone who has my hair
Or my smile
Does it make you think?
What if......?
Author notes
This is obviously about someone in my past. I have of course moved on in my life, rightfully so. It is so necassary that you are careful with your heart and soul. Careful not to give it away to quickly and careful not to keep it to yourself. I have a great life now, but there is this one person who comes up time and again.
Please tell me what you think
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WOW
You did a GREAT job on this write. I often think of things like this... thinking, okay - I'm done with you, but why do you still appear... and even more so, does this also happen to you? When you hear a phrase we use or see something we've done - do you remember me?
You did a great job on the write. I like the style, and word choice fit.
One thing I would like to point out:
Line 3 - By probably should be bye.
Otherwise, great job!
I look forward to reading more of yours.
Thanks for sharing!
-Jlynn xXx
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Cool
Hey this is cool!!!!!!!!! I am goin to take a guess that someone hurt you by leaving you??? I am sad for your loss but look up not down. This planet has six billion humans and not just one if you get what im trying to say. Hey good write and thanks for sharing!!!!!!!! -
i thought it intresting how you personafied the problem, in the the same sence you made the personification another ideal entirely. somthing that can be forgotten, put away, comes up again.
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love it!
That is such a great use of words, you do somehow always wounder "what if?". Even outside of romance theres always a what if I or didnt. you'r point was clear and used brillently.
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I loved this !!!
You took my breath away with this one and as 'sweettangelgrace', I can also relate on a personal level....It hit home...
It was sad and I could see longing in this write...
'You come up time and again,
I thought I buried you beneath the rubble of our words'
I loved this !!!
Elmarie
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Oucccccccccchhhh!!!!Hmmmmm... This is beautifully written.I could relate on a personal level. My heart goes out to you, as I know the feeling my dear! This poem is very touching and beautiful...It says everything in a very direct and poetic way... it made me picture the situation and feel the emotions but we all need to focus on things of change, things we adore, things that make us happy and look forward while still keeping the memories alive because the past is not erasable. It is what shapes us into who we are today but hope things will getting better.Keep up the good work! Wisk you love peace, love, light and pleasure!!!
GRACE
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