Pondering pricks do I see in the faces of preoccupied people
passing by in their penguin like restrained profiles
pretending their prostitution to corporations of their personalities
precludes any priority in the other of passion's preferences.
Pre-adult ignorance do they sense that my youthful portrait paints
pausing the steps of many by presuming my orbs see nothing profound
prejudicially preferring instead to pander to the profit prophets' palate
predictably preaching to themselves as wisdom only what is practical.
Poignancy pleading silently bleeds so profusely
pontificated in denial's public proclamations
presuming order and conformity preclude more precious pearls
primed in the more spiritual press of philanthropic paths.
Petitions of promise always please the social puppeteer's practice
pungently punishing my barely pubescent presence
polluting precarious souls into becoming moral phantoms and poltergeists
prolifically producing a pilgrim's passage to pall's pathetic plateau.
Pronouncements prospering by my mentally piercing points
prepare a few for seeing in them possibilities as portent,
pillows preserving through slumber for others their pained present
panic felt in their frowns from hearing my pavement philosophy.
Author notes
I don't know why, but I could add this image to the poem. So I left the link instead.
http://tinypic.com/view/?pic=2uxwso9
A contest entry
- Round 2 of Many by HerbalGoat.
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Comments
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Nice entry. I liked the idealism that hid beneath the alliteration. my favorite line was:
Petitions of promise always please the social puppeteer's practice
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Poignant and profound employment of the partial produced P. The tongue-twisting trip tutors one in the unpleasant perils of prejudice. I like how you have knowledge nesting with youth while with age we seem to lose self to structure.
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Thank you for the wonderful comment.
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You have done it again dear sir. A wonderful write with great alliteration. Congrats on your silver.
Becky
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Thank you so much for the kind words and congrats.
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This is excellent. I love the alliteration in this, particularly, this line: "Poignancy pleading silently bleeds so profusely..." What wonderful, vivid imagery! You are very talented as a writer.
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Thank you for the wonderful comment.
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i see you did well with this poem... but it really isn't working for me. not what i am looking fo
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Ah, this is a very well written poem. I can see why you got gold and silver for this poem
You've written this poem very well and I liked reading it. Thanks so much for entering my contest and good luck! My favorite lines were
"Poignancy pleading silently bleeds so profusely
pontificated in denial's public proclamations
presuming order and conformity preclude more precious pearls" Thanks again and take care!
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I'm glad you liked my entry. This is one of those poem where once I got started in a given direction, I just couldn't stop. But I guess it made for a good poem.
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Wow, this was absolutley amazing!
It truly is amazing that you managed 24 lines of illeration!!
Really you're an awesome writer.
I really liked:
"Petitions of promise always please the social puppeteer's practice
pungently punishing my barely pubescent presence
polluting precarious souls into becoming moral phantoms and poltergeists
prolifically producing a pilgrim's passage to pall's pathetic plateau."
Seriously, great job.
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This was one of those writes where once I got started with the allerteration I just couldn't stop. It really was fun to write though.
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i'm amazed
I think you misunderstood my rules, but you did not break them.. you didn't need to use so many words that start with "p," but it's cool that you did.
I don't know exactly what to say about your poem because you just stunned me. Wow, is really all I can say.
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Actually, I knew I didn't have to use so many words with P, but once I got started, I just couldn't stop. Sort of like eating peanuts or potato chips. Um, darn, there I go with the P's again. Anyway, I do appreciate you great comment.
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Brilliant as always
Great job penning this!
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Thank you. As usual you always leaves such great comments.
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Wow-
Powerful Piece penned penman
Pictures portrayed with philosophical poise
Thank You for sharing Your talent my Friend!
Keep that ink flowing~~~and Your Creative Mind
going
Best wishes to You in the contest
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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Hi Desire. Thanks so much for reading this one. This was sort of like eating peanuts. Once I got started on the alleration it was just kind of hard to stop.
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AHA! It all makes sense now!
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Hahaha...oh lordz...have you ever seen V for Vendetta? This should be P for Pounding the Pavement.
I love your work. *nods* That last line really put a smile on my face. Bravo, my friend. *bows to your mastery of the P*
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What could I do, P was the letting I was given to use in the contest. So I didn't want to take any chances, by not making sure I used it enough. Thanks for the great comment and glad to hear from you again.
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